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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Seeing nothing Hating the darkness Adjusting to the lonliness Deep inside my heart Out of the ashes Whirls a kind of peace Sleep my dying heart short and terrible...but it was something I wrote feeling alone and hurt. Tell me what you think..I know..it belongs in the dark passions forum...but hey..give me a break..i like this forum better  [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 02-01-2000).] |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
I liked your poem, and it doesn't matter at all that it's in this forum. I can relate, I went through a deep depression not to long ago, and your words can almost describe perfectly how I felt. "Sometimes people care too much. I think it's called love." -Winnie the Pooh |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Well dark it may be but it belongs here just as much as it does there. We all have to rid ourselves of our darkness from time to time. Now as for the poem. There is noting terrible about it. I consider it free form and it is very well written. |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
score another point for the sismister...LOL  yet again another poem...and Marilyn is right...it belongs there just as much as it does here...or vise versa...lol...hehe way to go sis |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
scg: heck, if i didn't post something "dark" every now and again i'd never have anything to post at all... i think this is a sorrowfully lovely poem... i particularly like the last line... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
thanks all...it's great to know that ya'll can accept the dark poems that I post..i greatly appreciate it |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
I accidently replied the same message twice! oops...i hope marilyn or Alwye will delete this one! If they can..I'd appreciate it! ~~Lavada [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 02-01-2000).] |
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