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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
she says i have a heart of gold but it only helps to weigh me down she rivets and halts the world at will just to prove thats shes still around and she needs to end my imperfections just to prove that she can doesnt she sound more like a man.. she wonders why i bother to care she will stop the wind in its very wake just to relish the sound of everyone's meager heart break.. |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Ohh.. I like this, definetly a woman you don't want to become entangled with.. I enjoyed your dark little description, I hope you can escape her hold.. Good poem though  In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. -- Abrahm Simons |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
jackal: again you've produced an exquisite poetical work... i particularly like the last three lines and what they express... keep up the excellent work... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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