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Smore Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 67el paso |
In your eyes I see my future and past In your eyes I see love that will last Your look travels to the depths of my soul It brings me feelings beyond all control In your eyes I see no lies In your eyes I see no good-byes Your love is something never to doubt Your love is something I can't do without In your eyes I see much more than you see In your eyes is the best place I can be. Love isn't a miracle in life, the miracle of life is love. [This message has been edited by Smore (edited 01-29-2000).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Really neat poem. I also wrote a poem called In Your Eyes but it's really different to yours. I'll post it so you can check it out. Keep  |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
smore: i really like this one a lot... i see it as a Doors song for some reason... *heh*... the only thing i dont understand is that last line(?) "Love isn't a miracle in life, the miracle of life is love"... not that i dont understand the meaning, just that it seems out of place if it is supposed to be part of the poem... if that is the last line of the poem, i suggest you take it out and write an entire nother poem about it, because it really doesnt fit here... anyway, i think the poem is much more powerful without it... if it's just a quote, try putting it as your "signature"... go to Members (above)/ edit profile... then type it in the "signature" box and save it... sincerely, jerome the boy with numb hands A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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