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A True Athlete (A Satire on a poem by Misty)
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A True Athlete (A Satire on a poem by Misty) |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
A True Athlete (inspired by a poem by Misty) When wanting to be an athlete, remember To keep your body lean and limber. Play hard and rough and have no remorse For the brain cells you kill playing sports. Competition is the meaning of life So pull on your jock strap, get out there and fight! The scouts are watching so you better play well To make the pros you gotta play for yourself. They say that an athlete's measured by heart But if you take the steroids, you'll get to start. Do all you can to be the best of the best Suck up to the coaches -- trample the rest. Spend High School living to score points in vain And hear some blonde cheerleader calling your name. And if you dont make the pros, it's still okay You can spend your whole life reliving the "good days." A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Bravo! Well done  I know some people at my school who are just like that. You brought a smile to my face after a long, crappy day. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
mistikman: glad to have helped cheer someone's day (even though my poem wasn't meant to be cheery per se)... i hope you'll read it's companion poem (the one by misty) and comment on hers also... that's one of the benefits of having poems modelled after you (in this case i was the modeller)... people read both of them (though i dont think anyone's reading mine ^_^*)...  sincerely, jerome the boy with numb hands A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
I have already read Misty's poem, and I did not respond for a few reasons, 1) It was late and I was tired, didnt feel like responding to anything. 2)I tend not to respond to poems with more than 5 posts unless it is absolutely fantastic, better to reply to the ones with less so some posts dont get bloated while others get ignored. This is precisely the reason I have not posted to the 5 funny poems thread by Master. 3)the view of athletes in Misty's poem is essentially the opposite of how I view them, so I couldnt really relate to it. The view presented in this one is rather close to my view, and I personally despise the total jocks at my school, so a little poetry mocking them is humorous to me I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
mistikman: frankly, this is my view of athletes (most of them... not all) as well... i just try not to offend anyone who might be an athlete, so i completely understand your position... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Penelope Junior Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 31 |
Jerome the boy with no brain, Sadly this poem describes more of the 'jock types' that I know than it insults. It's very well written, I especially like that you use punctuation (and not too much of it as I tend to do  ) I look forward to reading more of your writing.-Penny My advice in life is; talk to yourself, you never know what you'll learn. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Very interesting conversation going on here gentlemen. Being a "jock type" and female I look at things a bit differently. lol. I play sports for the enjoyment of the game, for the physical exersion that makes me feel wonderful. I love compitition and love to be challanged to better myself. There were a few years when I played ball on a team where I was the most compitent player. This caused me to become sloppy and less intent on my skills. When a few young and very talented players moved onto the team I was forced to work harder to keep my possition and physicaly I was challanged. It was wonderful to again be modivated. Just another point of view. |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
marilyn: i certainly dont dispute the possible benefits of playing sports and the enjoyment and disipline one gathers from athletic competition is based on the individual player... however, my experience with upper-level sports (high school and higher) is that the focus is on "being the best you can be" rather than learning from your activity or having fun... i've seen a lot of athletes driven by the forces of pride and desire for fame... i find it very sad... while there are many exceptions, i cannot accept the optimistic and idealistic view of athletics (as Misty's poem describes) in today's sports world... there is a darker side which i have attempted to explore (through satire, not seriousness) with my poem... i do hope that you continue to play and enjoy playing any and all sports... but i also hope that you dont fall into the same trap i see so many have fallen into: the trap of arrogance... sincerely, jerome the boy with the sinus headache A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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merely_a_jester Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 67Arkansas... that's all you get |
good take on the quote unquote "jock". i like the humor and the dark side you took to this stereotype that is, sadly but truely, actually prevailent in our modern society's many different teaching facilities, whether it be public high schools or upper level colleges thanks for the read just another twice invisible boy To Be, contents his natural desire, He asks no Angel's wing, no Seraph's fire; Alexander Pope |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
As a student at a good old fashoned 6 time state champs southern Basketball school, I know a lot about this topic. Sports can be fun and a learning experence... but that is very rarely the case. In fact, I feel sorry for the "jocks". Their entire self-worth has been baised on their physical abilities, and any other aptitudes have been ignored. Therefore, their entire lives revolve around sports. They train all summer for football, then they train all though Christmas break for Football, then they train all though Spring Break for baseball, then it starts all over again. Their familys, their school and their town all give them pressure to "do better than last season". But then they get out of High School, and the same thing happens in college. And most athletes end there, or go to the pros for a few years and get injured. Then what? Their entire self-worth, the thing that their lives have revolved around for so long is gone. Then they live in the past. It is truely sad. Well, there I go running off at the mouth. Good job on the poem! "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
lovebug: thank you, first of all for your kind words, and secondly for your amusing narrative (check my post on your poem "you are like the diamond" if you haven't already... very good job)... sincerely, jerome the boy that must use the bathroom NOW... *ugh* A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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