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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-01-23 01:21 AM

Nature, with her frozen glance,
Proves to us that she’s immortal.
Time chokes minutes with its hands
Slowly squeezing the aorta.

Naked trees in passion sway,
Sweeping stars, while none will fall.
Icy puddles mark my way--
Dark like windows of one’s soul.

Freezing doves sit on a cable
Staring at the pale sky.
Wind-- the hand that rocks the cradle,
Softly sings a lullaby.

Thus I linger, sad and dreary,
Breathing in the silent night.
Shaking lips still prove my theory,
It’s so cold-- dreams freeze in flight.

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 01-23-2000).]

abra-cadabra
Member

since 1999-06-21

Posts 75
Florissant, Missouri, USA

1 posted 2000-01-23 02:07 PM

Wow this is really good. I love it! Keep it up.

Star Fairy 2
Member

since 1999-09-06

Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa

2 posted 2000-01-23 02:58 PM

i love the descriptive metaphors... great job...

Regret for things you did maybe tempered by time, regret for things you Didn't do, however, is inconsolable...
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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

3 posted 2000-01-23 05:11 PM

Thank you both!

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

4 posted 2000-01-23 06:44 PM

rarely ive been coming into teen poetry but whenever i do i see your awesome stuff up here master =)

horribly unappreciated but i dont think it could ever get its true ammount =)

beautiful stuff here beautiful

peanogrl83
Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 202

5 posted 2000-01-23 09:53 PM

Phew! You've done it again, Master.....(that is, taken my breath away) Another beautiful piece.....how is that you can prolifically write such wonderful work? :.) (I'm duly jealous... lol) Keep writing, my walls have lots of space.... ;.)
Vreni

Oo0ostephanio0oO
Member

since 2000-01-19

Posts 194
Massachusetts ~USA~

6 posted 2000-01-23 10:30 PM

wow! so is this why you're called master?
your poems are truly incredible

:

(:***Stephani***:)
"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

7 posted 2000-01-24 12:09 PM

I agree with Kevin, your work is definitely underappreciated. This is superb work. I absolutely love "t’s so cold-- dreams freeze in flight." and the whole feel and flow of the poem in general. It hit me hard. Beautiful job, I'm truly impressed.

*Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

8 posted 2000-01-24 12:19 PM

I thank all of you for your kind comments.

Kevin, I enjoy your work just as much.

peanogrl83, I'll see what I can do to cover those walls! LOL

Thank you Stephanie, glad you liked it.

Alwye, as long as you and Kevin keep reading, I'm happy! I don't want to be popular, I just want to be loved. *S* Thanks for responding!

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