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Singer1981
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since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA

0 posted 2000-01-19 03:14 PM


Day breaks
The sun appears on the horizon
I swear it gets closer everyday
As I run along the road
I can feel the rays on my back
Beating down
On me
Like he does when he gets mad

But I'm not gonna cry
I keep looking at the sun overhead
To better things, and better days
That I know are just around the corner

She sings
Like an angel out of the heavens
I swear I see the light about her
As she seems to float to me
She opens her mouth and I hear
No angel
Just pain
Nothing ever seems to change

But I'm not gonna cry
I keep looking at the sun overhead
To better things, and better days
That I know are just around the corner

Just breathe
She says to me, angel of my dreams
I swear the pain will all dissapear
The light is all around me
I feel as if I am floating
And I am
Floating
And I know I am safe

But I'm not gonna cry
I keep looking at the sun overhead
To better things, and better days
That I know are just around the corner.

© Copyright 2000 Sarah Goldstein - All Rights Reserved
sweetcollege_girl
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since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
1 posted 2000-01-19 03:30 PM


Wow..truly powerful...as for a name..how about "Angel of my Dreams"...you use it alot..just a suggestion
Singer1981
Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
2 posted 2000-01-19 03:58 PM


thanx    I'll take that into consideration.  
Oo0ostephanio0oO
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since 2000-01-19
Posts 194
Massachusetts ~USA~
3 posted 2000-01-19 04:52 PM


keep up the powerful work..."The Vigor of I in My Days"


 (:***Stephani***:)
"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."


Kitty
Junior Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 20
Paris, Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-01-19 05:15 PM


Wow, thats all I can say. This is powerful stuff.

 He has made everything beautiful in its time
Ecclesiastes 3:11

Kitty

LyricFetish
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
5 posted 2000-01-19 05:54 PM


That was so beautiful.
I like "angel of my dreams", or maybe just "angel".

Singer1981
Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
6 posted 2000-01-19 06:09 PM


stephani, kitty, and lyric--thank you all for your comments, and lyric-I really do like Angel.  It's simple...and it definitely says what I'm going for...all in that one word.  THanks everyone    I look forward to hearing more from all of you!  
~Sarah

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