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foolinlove
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since 2000-01-09
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0 posted 2000-01-16 06:15 PM



I am very confused
my heart is all brused
I feel like I've been used
And Wrongfully accused

I am very scared
of loosing a passion I shared
It is what I always feared
but I will always hold her dear

I am never afraid but scared to death
wishing she had never left
She is the best
I've treated her better than the rest

Having to fight the pain
holding back the tears
that want to fall with the rain
Even if make it to fame
I shall never be the same
My heart filled with shame

I thought I was the game
yet I'm not even a mouse
I have my self to blame
and deserve to be in a mental house

I want for ppl to hear what I say and read what I feel and make compliments or completes either one just tell the truth on what you think of this poem so please respond. Thanks Brandon Superman Westley (foolinlove)

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Star Fairy 2
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa
1 posted 2000-01-16 06:19 PM


the rhyming, flowing, scheme of things of the poem were written very well... great job!

 Don't Fall.. Rise in Love
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