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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
When she came into my life I was filled with glee All I feared was that she would not like me When I spoke, she listened and smiled once or twice My fears were lifted for she was truly nice I wanted her to like me more as I liked her I feared that she would not and that upon my heart she would commit murder She failed to return my affection And my fear was realized For sticking my neck out I was penalized Now my fear is growing feeding off my mistake I have dreams of loss and sorrow and it feels as if my soul was raped I sit alone and wonder if I will make it through the night Now it is only myself that I fear can I continue this horrible fight? |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Yeesh...go away for a few days and come back to find all this lovely poetry to read, which will make excellent use of my time and inspire me all the more. I loved the poem, it hit close to home. Lovely. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
cool! i really like how you used imagery. keep up the good work. -nicnac8 |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Thank you for the kind words. This is what I consider my best poem so far. I wrote it a few days after the girl in question refused to go out with me and the shaky friendship I had with her collapsed. We went from being friendly with each other to not speaking or even having eye contact. At the time I wrote this I was in a near suicidal depression, which luckily subsided quickly, partly due to my best friend from 10 years ago coming down to visit. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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cougaryouth Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 25 |
Cool peom it had alot of deep feelings, tell me do you write from your feelings or from observation? just a curiosity of mine. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
I write only from personal experiences and feelings. I also find that I cannot write poetry when I am happy, I need something thats gnawing away at me to express in poetry. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Go Mistikman! Great job. This hit home pretty hard. It happened to me once. Your doing a great job writing though. Keep up the good work, I'll be looking for your next post! |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
"my soul was raped" powerful words... overall... wonderful job at venting your feelings... Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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