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LoveBug
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0 posted 2000-01-13 03:31 PM


Thanks to Jer for the title suggestion!

I look into those eyes
That will never look in mine
I wish that you would look at me
Just once, just one time
But I know this will never be
Maybe it isn’t God’s will
That I will be happy this soon
But I go on praying still
Praying those eyes would look into mine
That they would search my soul
I wish this more than anything else
This would make my life whole
I look into those beautiful eyes
Those beautiful eyes of blue
I would give my heart, my soul
For just one glimpse from you
Sometime, I think I see those eyes
Looking deep into mine
And I’m filled with happiness
Knowing the love I’ll find
And then, I awake and know
That none of this was real
And no words written can describe
The disappointment and pain I feel
But now, I live from one dream to the next
I live for this perfect land
Where you look at me with those beautiful eyes
But all dreams crumble into sand
And then, I’ll be back where I was before
Praying and wishing in vain
For something that I can’t have
And going through all this pain
But, when I can’t take it anymore
And when all hope is gone, it seems
I just wait for those precious moments I sleep
I live my life for my dreams

~LoveBug~

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

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peanogrl83
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1 posted 2000-01-13 08:01 PM


Oh wow! I really like this poem!  Good job! Is it speaking from experience?    
                                 Vreni

Nimue
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2 posted 2000-01-13 08:37 PM


Wow, this is a beautiful poem!  I really love the idea of it, and I think I can identify.     ~ Nimue

 "Touch passion when it comes to you. As rare enough as it is, don't walk away when it calls you by name." ~Marcus Cole, Babylon 5

Jer
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3 posted 2000-01-13 10:55 PM


Hey...  You took my title advice. You got me blushing.  You already know I think highly of this poem and rest of your work. As always, great job.
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4 posted 2000-01-14 11:47 AM


Hey! Thanks for the nice comments, everyone! Yes, almost all of my work is taken from my own life.

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

poetry_kills
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5 posted 2000-01-15 12:00 PM


lovebug: very good work... you manage to express with simple yet beautiful imagery the experience of love unreturned... i have only one question... in the parts where you talk about "looking into the eyes that will never look into yours" where [or how] are you looking into those eyes?  is it in your dreams?  the end left me thinking so, but the beginning left me believing that you were staring at a photograph of the person as you wrote... just wondered  

sincerely,

 **jerome the boy whose brain got left out in the rain and nobody bothered to dry it off when they put it back in

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6 posted 2000-01-15 09:02 AM


Poetry, when I say that I'm looking into his eyes, it means that I'm really looking into his eyes when no one is looking, not even him. I'm not sure if that's really looking into someone's eyes, but I think it is. It's as close as I'll get, anyway...

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

cougaryouth
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7 posted 2000-01-15 12:40 PM


Wow this is my favorite poem yet. I really enjoyed this one. It sounds like something I would write. Keep it up and so far you are my favorite poet in here yet.
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