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LoveBug
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0 posted 01-08-2000 02:15 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LoveBug

Hi! I'm new to the forum! Everyone here seems nice and talented,so I'm going to share one of my poems with you, and I hope you will tell me what you think!


I'm in love with a guy who has a girlfriend. My friend just broke up with her boyfriend, so I wrote this to tell her how I feel.


You sit and cry over love lost
And you still hold your ground
But someday you will realize the truth
And be glad of the love you found


It must be awful to lose a love
But I think of one thing, more and more
What is worse, losing true love
Or having never possessed it before?


You have had your true love
And known his touch
While I sat alone
And missed so much


You have danced with your love
And he gave you a twirl
While I saw my true love
Doing the same with another girl


You have held your love close
And he gave you a kiss
And I knew that I would never
Find love like this


So, when you sit and cry
Over the love you lost
Sob, mourn, and pout
Over loveís high cost


Be happy that you had love before
And remember what Iíve missed
Iíll never hold my love close
And heíll never slip me a kiss


Remember your friend that has never been loved
Remember as you see her stare
At her true love with another girl
And know he'll never care


Remember her when you know
How hard that she has cried
Because she knows her true love
Will never be by her side


So, when you think of love lost
Think of me, and recall
ďItís better to have loved and lost
Than to have never loved at allĒ

~LoveBug

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Marilyn
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1 posted 01-08-2000 03:29 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Welcome to Passions. I hope you enjoyed the e-card with your poem. This is well done for a beginner. I hope to see more from you here in the Teen Forum.
LoveBug
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2 posted 01-08-2000 06:06 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Thanks, Marilyn! I hope I will improve over time!

~LoveBug
Alwye
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3 posted 01-08-2000 09:58 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Exellent work, welcome to Passions!  I look forward to more of your work!  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


Jer
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4 posted 01-09-2000 10:00 PM       View Profile for Jer   Email Jer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jer

Wow... this was great.  The feelings are so apparent and there.  I like it. I'm sorry you have to go threw with what is happening.  But, just to let you know....  I stand in the mist of your perspective.  It is worst to not have true love then to to have it and lose it. Good work ... and nice for your first post.
Misty
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5 posted 01-10-2000 06:36 PM       View Profile for Misty   Email Misty   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Misty's Home Page   View IP for Misty

Im sorry about your love problem, but this is a good poem, I would of never thought you were a new poet, I love reading your poems! Keep posting them!

 ©Misty
For more Poems bye Misty GO TO:
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"You died a failure because you never tried!"

ILoveSrfrs
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since 11-14-1999
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6 posted 01-15-2000 07:37 PM       View Profile for ILoveSrfrs   Email ILoveSrfrs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ILoveSrfrs

WOW! This is a great poem, and I can definitly relate to this ( i am in the same position too ) ...cant wait to see more of your work! great job!
Astraea
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7 posted 01-15-2000 09:16 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

I like this!  I'm in the same position, and so it struck close to home.  Lovely.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

nicnac8
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since 07-28-99
Posts 46
New York, N.Y. USA


8 posted 01-16-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for nicnac8   Email nicnac8   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nicnac8

Wow, what a powerful poem. It was very sad though. I'm a little upset, though, u stole my quote and put it at the end of your poem-"It's better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all."

~nicnac8
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9 posted 01-16-2000 09:40 AM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

nicnac, I wrote this poem before I came here, and posted it on my first day as a member, so I didn't know it was "your" quote.  

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"
Allan Riverwood
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10 posted 05-06-2001 02:28 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

I found this poem to be very sad... truly it must not be easy for you, being in such a situation.  However it might be wise to make sure that your friend realizes you still have sympathy for her as well, even if she's in a better situation than her.     
Still, keep your head high, alright?  Maybe someday if you keep on smiling, you'll meet a guy (or four ) who treats you right.  
Welcome to Passions in Poetry!  Eventually, if you spend enough time with us, you'll find yourself really improving your skill.  I can't wait to see you in here more!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.††Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.††
~Unknown

Artic Wind
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11 posted 11-15-2007 07:46 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
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