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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697
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Hi! I'm new to the forum! Everyone here seems nice and talented,so I'm going to share one of my poems with you, and I hope you will tell me what you think! I'm in love with a guy who has a girlfriend. My friend just broke up with her boyfriend, so I wrote this to tell her how I feel. You sit and cry over love lost And you still hold your ground But someday you will realize the truth And be glad of the love you found It must be awful to lose a love But I think of one thing, more and more What is worse, losing true love Or having never possessed it before? You have had your true love And known his touch While I sat alone And missed so much You have danced with your love And he gave you a twirl While I saw my true love Doing the same with another girl You have held your love close And he gave you a kiss And I knew that I would never Find love like this So, when you sit and cry Over the love you lost Sob, mourn, and pout Over love’s high cost Be happy that you had love before And remember what I’ve missed I’ll never hold my love close And he’ll never slip me a kiss Remember your friend that has never been loved Remember as you see her stare At her true love with another girl And know he'll never care Remember her when you know How hard that she has cried Because she knows her true love Will never be by her side So, when you think of love lost Think of me, and recall “It’s better to have loved and lost Than to have never loved at all” ~LoveBug |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions. I hope you enjoyed the e-card with your poem. This is well done for a beginner. I hope to see more from you here in the Teen Forum. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Thanks, Marilyn! I hope I will improve over time! ~LoveBug |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Exellent work, welcome to Passions! I look forward to more of your work!  *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Wow... this was great. The feelings are so apparent and there. I like it. I'm sorry you have to go threw with what is happening. But, just to let you know.... I stand in the mist of your perspective. It is worst to not have true love then to to have it and lose it. Good work ... and nice for your first post. |
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Misty Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 121USA |
Im sorry about your love problem, but this is a good poem, I would of never thought you were a new poet, I love reading your poems! Keep posting them! ©Misty For more Poems bye Misty GO TO: http://www.geocities.com/Paris/Arc/1644 "You died a failure because you never tried!" |
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ILoveSrfrs Member
since 1999-11-14
Posts 69California |
WOW! This is a great poem, and I can definitly relate to this ( i am in the same position too ) ...cant wait to see more of your work! great job! |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
I like this! I'm in the same position, and so it struck close to home. Lovely. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
Wow, what a powerful poem. It was very sad though. I'm a little upset, though, u stole my quote and put it at the end of your poem-"It's better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all." ~nicnac8 |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
nicnac, I wrote this poem before I came here, and posted it on my first day as a member, so I didn't know it was "your" quote. "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I found this poem to be very sad... truly it must not be easy for you, being in such a situation. However it might be wise to make sure that your friend realizes you still have sympathy for her as well, even if she's in a better situation than her. Still, keep your head high, alright? Maybe someday if you keep on smiling, you'll meet a guy (or four  ) who treats you right. Welcome to Passions in Poetry! Eventually, if you spend enough time with us, you'll find yourself really improving your skill. I can't wait to see you in here more! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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