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Distant Echoes (For Poetic Dreams)
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Distant Echoes (For Poetic Dreams) |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
They bottled our voices No more to be heard All want to stand up But none say a word Beaten, pushed around Slaughtered and killed We have faced many Dangers; suffered ills Taken from home Raped like a beast Not animal, I Not in the least Called so many things My heart will implore From Negro to dog Don't you know anymore? Now slowly we rise Our heads from so low The whips and the guns Our flesh now do show Our goal is the same That is to be free To have our own lives In this world to be me If I make it not My cry will be heard I fought on my feet Now fly like a bird This is just a rough idea of how to put this in poetic form. This is VERY rough and I wasn't happy with the final out come of it. I don't have a lot of time to devote to writing right now and I apologize for that. I am sure that you can rewrite it into something better. I hope you get the idea of what I was speaking of with this piece. |
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Diajua New Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 4 |
You did fine, it's a nice poem.Always remember this:If you can imagine it, you can achieve it, if you can dream it, you can become it. |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
That is really good and really true. You are a good writer and you atleast admit that you don't have a lot of time to write. (Unlike me) that was a very powerful poem and I'm pretty sure that it's fine just the way it is. You always give me advice, but I have none to give!! Loves may seem forgotten, but the true will once shine through. |
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