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shyone
Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 10


0 posted 2000-01-03 10:48 PM


Since I first saw you,
I knew I loved you.
I knew you were the one for me.
I knew we'd be together,
Until the hour glass of time runs out.
We'd love eachother far beyond forever.
I knew you'd consume my heart,
with all that you are.
I knew that we'd cherrish every moment,
That we would spend together.
I knew I'd never feel this again,
The feelings I feel for you.
I knew if I lost you,
Forever I'd be blue.
And I knew all this,
Since I first saw you.

I'm extremely new to the poetry writing thing, but it comes frrom the heart.  I wrote it because it is what I wish I had the courage to tell this girl at school.  If you're reading this, Jonnie, it's how I really feel.  If you're not Jonnie, and you're reading this, please tell me what you think.  I really want to know.

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Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2000-01-03 10:53 PM


Welcome to Passions   I thought your poem was very good and hope to see more from you really soon.  

 ~Susie~



Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
2 posted 2000-01-03 10:57 PM


Wonderful work, I hope she listens to what you have to say.  Welcome to Passions!  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha



Blue Eyed Wanderer
Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 84
Rhode Island, US
3 posted 2000-01-04 05:19 PM


This is great! If she doesn't read it here, you should definately give it to her. Best of luck! And welcome to Passions!
~Jess~

April Resi
Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119
Alabama
4 posted 2000-01-04 06:26 PM


Very good poem! I liked it a great deal and I wish you luck with this girl. Welcome to passions, and I can't wait to hear more from you!
April

 ...in your eyes, I see my future in an instant,
And there it goes, I think I found my best friend...


shyone
Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 10

5 posted 2000-01-04 07:28 PM


Wow!  Thanks for the wonderful comments!  I'll put a couple more poems up as soon as I finish my homework.
Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
6 posted 2000-01-04 08:01 PM


Welcome to Passions. Writing from the heart is where you start. If you are interested in persuing poetry farther I have posted some poetry pointer sites here. If you are interested in seeing them please contact me and I will move them back to the top of the page.
Diajua
New Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 4

7 posted 2000-01-04 11:14 PM


        
   I enjoyed your poem very much,you have a lot of talentgood luck.


 

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