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Her Emptiness
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Her Emptiness |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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A veil of starlight Cascades upon her visage The tears of forever Etched upon porcelain features. A flowering image Stricken by the inky night A greying shadow Replacing the rainbow of youth. Her children murdered In a scarlet haze The brilliant blade Almost robbing her own life. A lover's promise shattered As a single phrase Let a single spray of hope Slip away. A desolate skeleton Of the warmth she once was Haunting aimlessly Her own watercolor memories. The wind's icy tendrils Beckon to the lonely ones She follows the masses Searching for what she's lost. Withered to the bone She drifts outward Upon the open breeze Of emptiness. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
WOW! Ahhh... I love to post replies to peoples work and give comments but, I read this one and I cannot even begin to write words on how I feel about this one. It's great to read other peoples work and see different views on subjects. The way you worded this poem was incredible. I especially was touched by "A desolate skeleton Of the warmth she once was Haunting aimlessly Her own watercolor memories." Just a fine example of a great work on this board. Keep up the good work Alwye, I’ll be reading your works! |
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Blue Eyed Wanderer Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 84Rhode Island, US |
The whole poem was perfect, but the fifth verse especially struck me too. Sounds like this could have been me the way I was some time ago. I don't know what else to say but WoW. ~Jess~ |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully done Krista. Very well written piece. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you guys very much for your kindness. I appreciate it!  *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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