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PoeticDreams
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since 1999-12-23
Posts 35
Lindsay,Oklahoma US

0 posted 1999-12-30 04:17 AM


Yours eyes glisten
In the windswept candlelight
Like angels dancing
On the moonlight pools of forever.
The light glides across you,
creating shadows of passion sillhouetting my heart.
Lusicous lips carrying dreams of eternal love.
Whispering to my heart with ever Precious kiss.
The shadows dance around,
Fading into the embracing candle's light.
The night, an empty canvas
To be painted with desire.
Golden seas of silken touch,
The window to your soul.
A hollowed, glistened gold.
And your heart,
a single candle




[This message has been edited by PoeticDreams (edited 12-30-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 Elisha Bennett - All Rights Reserved
Rodeo Jones
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since 2000-01-01
Posts 18
San Jose, CA, USA
1 posted 2000-01-02 12:22 PM


I really like the vivid imagery in this poem.  Aaah, verry vivid...where's the popcorn?

RJ

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
2 posted 2000-01-02 06:41 AM


This is beautiful P.D!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


eagle
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since 1999-10-20
Posts 39
singapore
3 posted 2000-01-02 08:22 AM


Yeps... simply Beautiful  
Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
4 posted 2000-01-02 09:10 PM


Indeed very beautiful!  I love good imagery, and this suited my tastes very well.  A wonderful picture you've painted here.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha



Midnight
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since 1999-11-25
Posts 28

5 posted 2000-01-03 03:44 PM



The imagery on this one was great! Keep writing, you have talent!

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