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PoeticDreams
Junior Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 35
Lindsay,Oklahoma US

0 posted 1999-12-28 05:54 AM


As I stare at lil children no worry in there eyes
My life sux then do I realize
I've followed the path that everyone thought that I would take
They knew I was all talk
I'm just a fake
They knew where I started they knew where I would end
People always made fun, we were poor I was always late on the fashion trend
But I disappointed them
I changed my ways the rode I wound up on
Now to God's word I am ever so drown
I was a weed smokin pill poppin punk
Who lived in a trunk
But I decide this had to stop
I went to work, got me an apartment
Going to school.
See you don't always have to do what others say
You can do things your way
Its your life, do things right
Show people you still have a fight


 ~¤Always look to the
sunrise and you'll never
see the shadows¤~Anee
Frank

© Copyright 1999 Elisha Bennett - All Rights Reserved
shell-grunge
Junior Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 17

1 posted 1999-12-28 06:06 AM


i really liked it!
i could see it as lyrics. power.
showed them where to stick it!!!!

go off like a frog in a sock!!!

shell

Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 1999-12-28 12:37 PM


Welcome to Passions. Indeed strong words. Continue to follow the path that leads you to happiness. One small thought. When you post so many poems all at once, some get over looked. Post them one at a time and you will receive more replies to each. Again Welocme.  
Leigh
Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 20

3 posted 1999-12-29 01:07 PM


That was so great! I think shell was right about the lyrics thing. I can see that becoming a song or something like that. Keep up the writing!! I love it!
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