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Marissa
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since 1999-12-25
Posts 20


0 posted 1999-12-27 10:00 PM


There is this certain someone who makes me feel a certain way.
"Don't waste your time, he'll only hurt you" is what some people say.

But when he smiles and looks my way, my heart begins to pound.
I could listen to him talk for hours, his voice is one of the sweetest sounds.

It feels so good to see his charming face
And even better to be enveloped in his warm, sweet embrace.

It puts me in a state of bliss
To know I'm the one he chooses to kiss.

Whenever he's around I grin form ear to ear,
But in the back of my mind what those people said, I can surely still hear.

Too wrapped up in the way he makes me feel
I'm willing to get hurt, even though a heart takes long to heal.

I hope the day does not come soon when he says my name
Only to reveal that he no longer feels the same.

© Copyright 1999 Marissa - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871
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1 posted 1999-12-27 10:08 PM


Marissa, you have talent! Keep writing! I hope this guy proves everyone else wrong. Good luck with him and welcome to Passions!

Elizabeth

 "Boys and girls together, me and Mamie O'Rourke
Tripped the light fantastic on the sidewalks of New York."



Angel
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since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
Pennsylvania
2 posted 1999-12-27 10:29 PM


Welcome to Passions  ! You do have talent. And as far as this guy goes, don't be afraid to give him a chance. People said the same things about my boyfriend and we have been together for fifteen months, no one thought it would last any longer than a week. If he does break your heart, use it as a learning experience. Yes it hurts, but you will heal with time. Keep up the good work, hope to see more from you soon  .

 ~Susie~



starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
3 posted 1999-12-27 11:20 PM


NO!!! marissa...
  Please feel welcome
  and please dont be shy
  we hope to become your 2nd home
  and that you never say goodbye...

just alittle something i wrote for ya...hope you like it!!
  

Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
4 posted 1999-12-27 11:29 PM


Welcome to Passions!   Keep reading and writting. For a first attempt this is well done. You express yourself well. Don't be afraid to experiment and try to broaden your writting.

Mairlyn.

Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
5 posted 1999-12-27 11:31 PM


Wonderful work, do take the chance with him. Welcome To Passions!  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha



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