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shell-grunge
Junior Member

since 1999-12-23

Posts 17

0 posted 1999-12-26 05:39 AM

heres another one, pretty obvious subject to the naked eye, i wrote it before hospital, worked on it in hospital, and finished it off at home, hope it's in standard.

So speak beast, speak
Your deliterios scripts, from a false spine of turpitude
to lead me on yur crooked path
of starved mortality
While you chisled my zests
to pointed limbs
with a blade polished with the stolen migh
of my fractured dreams

Your vexing demands
hacked silently, entrenched in my ghost
Thin as a rail, lowest eb, you shacled my ankles
on pentual tracks, entailing castigation

And on pentual tracks you dragged me,
throtled, diluted, naked and blind
Chained to you henious unwavering ambushes blurred, dwindeling lone
pegged to every flaw, praying

So speak beast, speak
Your deliterious scripts from a false spine of turpitude
that i will kick
to a paltry crumbled debris
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and there we are
thanx.
keep the writing up everyone!
hope you all had a good christmas

-shell

Quiet Lightning
Member

since 1999-12-26

Posts 56

1 posted 1999-12-26 01:11 PM

The poem you wrote was very deep and I was just wondering what were you in the hospital for?

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

2 posted 1999-12-26 09:41 PM

Another well written piece. You certianly have some talent. I hope you are doing better. Writing helps with a lot of things. I wish you the best of luck.

*Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

shell-grunge
Junior Member

since 1999-12-23

Posts 17

3 posted 1999-12-27 02:33 AM

thanx quiet and alwye.
i was hospitalised with anorexia. this was my secound time.
thank-yiou for your replys it helps to know that its not just a bunch of scribble.
you've raised my hopes.

shell

Marissa
Junior Member

since 1999-12-25

Posts 20

4 posted 1999-12-27 09:51 PM

That was really great. You know how to express your feelings very well. I'll say a prayer for you in hope that you will get better. Hang in there, good luck.

starboards
Member

since 1999-10-14

Posts 467
longwood, florida

5 posted 1999-12-27 11:32 PM

Shell-
I cant say very much about the feelings that you're going through..so i wont say anything...i just hope that you get better and know that you have a family out here that will always love you...great poem, sometimes being in different spots brings creative juices, just as this poem has just shown, nice job!

Ashley
p.s. if you need to talk, email me k?

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