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Ender
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0 posted 12-20-1999 08:08 PM       View Profile for Ender   Email Ender   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Ender's Home Page   View IP for Ender

If you read my poem to the girl i love called "do i have a chance", please read this.

I did give her the poem.  I did tell her how i felt about her.  I did all that.  And guess what.  She said no.  life sucks dont it.  and what sucks even more is that there arent many other girls at my school i can go out with (my high school has 80 kids in it, and that really limits me).  so now i am stuck.  she knows i love her.  She knows how i feel about her.  What can i do?

in case you are wondering what poem i am talking about, here it is.


*Do I Have a Chance?*
When I look into those glowing eyes of yours
My world seems to stop
As the omnipresent beauty from within appears
You glow like a light in the dark of night
As your splendor radiates from you
You would stop any man in his tracks
With that great beauty of yours
For it did stop me
When I first saw you
I thought to myself
“Do I have a chance”
A sense of doubt when through me
And I brushed the idea away
Knowing that since you are a junior
And me, a freshman
There is probably no chance at all
But, whenever I see you in the hall
Or in the class
I always feel like I have found the one
That I truly love
But the question is
Will you share the feeling
Or will we “Just be friends”
You should know by now that I love you
And that I always will
I have given you signs
Even a child would know
But if you didn’t
I tell you now
In order to get it off my chest
And into your heart

To where you can understand it all
And where you may actually start
Feeling the same way about me
As I do you
For I love you
And always will
Until the day we shall part
And never meet again
But until that day comes
Would you please
Share your love with me
So that I can feel like someone


© Copyright 1999 Richard Melick - All Rights Reserved
starboards
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1 posted 12-21-1999 12:06 AM       View Profile for starboards   Email starboards   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for starboards

how sweet ender...i dont know why she said no...she must be stupid to reject a guy like you...smile hun!

 
"I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget"
angel baby
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Ender~
You have a great talent at writing, and obviously this girl isn't worth your time if she isn't going to even give you a chance.  Keep smiling and keep up on the great poetry!
ickle
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3 posted 12-21-1999 08:05 AM       View Profile for ickle   Email ickle   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for ickle

she may have been scared by your poem, it is an amazing poem and all but my boyfriend sent me a poem telling me how he felt about me and i have to admit it scared me, love can be scary, anyway back to you, don't let her reaction discourage you i'm sure with your great talent someone more diserving of you will come along!

xx
Marilyn
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4 posted 12-21-1999 07:13 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I am sorry that this happened to you. I just have a couple of comments. First, you can not make someone love you, no matter how hard you try. The second is, you are young and I wouldn't worry too much about love at this point in your life. It will come when it is ready.

Now about the format of this... . I am glad that you added the poem to this thread. If you had just commented I would have had to delete this tread. We are a family here and we do enjoy learning about eachother...but...this is a poetry forum. We must keep the posts here to poetry. There are places in Passions to post announcements and comments. Thankyou  
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good replys
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