Teen Poetry #2 |
comment regarding my poem to the girl i love |
Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
If you read my poem to the girl i love called "do i have a chance", please read this. I did give her the poem. I did tell her how i felt about her. I did all that. And guess what. She said no. life sucks dont it. and what sucks even more is that there arent many other girls at my school i can go out with (my high school has 80 kids in it, and that really limits me). so now i am stuck. she knows i love her. She knows how i feel about her. What can i do? in case you are wondering what poem i am talking about, here it is. *Do I Have a Chance?* When I look into those glowing eyes of yours My world seems to stop As the omnipresent beauty from within appears You glow like a light in the dark of night As your splendor radiates from you You would stop any man in his tracks With that great beauty of yours For it did stop me When I first saw you I thought to myself “Do I have a chance” A sense of doubt when through me And I brushed the idea away Knowing that since you are a junior And me, a freshman There is probably no chance at all But, whenever I see you in the hall Or in the class I always feel like I have found the one That I truly love But the question is Will you share the feeling Or will we “Just be friends” You should know by now that I love you And that I always will I have given you signs Even a child would know But if you didn’t I tell you now In order to get it off my chest And into your heart To where you can understand it all And where you may actually start Feeling the same way about me As I do you For I love you And always will Until the day we shall part And never meet again But until that day comes Would you please Share your love with me So that I can feel like someone |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
how sweet ender...i dont know why she said no...she must be stupid to reject a guy like you...smile hun! "I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget" |
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angel baby New Member
since 1999-12-06
Posts 4 |
Ender~ You have a great talent at writing, and obviously this girl isn't worth your time if she isn't going to even give you a chance. Keep smiling and keep up on the great poetry! |
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ickle New Member
since 1999-12-21
Posts 1northern ireland |
she may have been scared by your poem, it is an amazing poem and all but my boyfriend sent me a poem telling me how he felt about me and i have to admit it scared me, love can be scary, anyway back to you, don't let her reaction discourage you i'm sure with your great talent someone more diserving of you will come along! xx |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I am sorry that this happened to you. I just have a couple of comments. First, you can not make someone love you, no matter how hard you try. The second is, you are young and I wouldn't worry too much about love at this point in your life. It will come when it is ready. Now about the format of this... . I am glad that you added the poem to this thread. If you had just commented I would have had to delete this tread. We are a family here and we do enjoy learning about eachother...but...this is a poetry forum. We must keep the posts here to poetry. There are places in Passions to post announcements and comments. Thankyou |
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Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wow! You are so awesome! [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 05-06-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Way to count! |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Look hun I've done the same thing and had the same done to me. And I'll admit it is a little scary when somone says they luv ya. I'm workin' on a relationship with this guy and I won't tell him I luv yet 'cause I'm worried that he might be scared off or whatever. But if she could just dismiss your feelings like that. Then she might not be worth it. I wouldn't know though because I've neva met her. Good luck wid any of ya future gals though. And I love the peom it is very sweet even though you do come on a little strong. That's what poems are for. And I'm out. |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Good peom. She must be a little glad that someone feels that way about her. I feel sorry for you since ya only got 80 kids. There are 800 in my school. But I still don't have much luck with guys. And those that do like me I don't like them. At least not any more. You'll find someone who feels the same about you that you feel about her, someday. That makes me sound old but it's gotta be true. |
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since 2007-09-16
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