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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden


0 posted 12-13-1999 04:02 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Allysa

Walking.
Hold my hand.
Venture to,
another land.
Take me,
far from this place.
To a land,
without disgrace.
A land,
withpout problems.
a land,
without death.
a land where you don't worry,
about what's left.
A land,
without pain
a different land.
I've gone insane.
Take me away,
to where roses blume.
Take me away,
to where it's always June.
Take me away,
to someplace new.
Take me away,
I want to go with you.
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Live a life of happiness
© Copyright 1999 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
Marilyn
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since 09-26-1999
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Ontario, Canada


1 posted 12-14-1999 09:40 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Very nice. I enjoyed this little trip to another land. Hope to see more of you.
myslinky
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since 11-25-1999
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2 posted 12-15-1999 01:24 AM       View Profile for myslinky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for myslinky

This is a great poem.  why donŽt you title it Take me or IŽll go if you take me.

Just some sugestions!
UNLOVED-1
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since 12-15-1999
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dominican republic


3 posted 12-15-1999 11:15 AM       View Profile for UNLOVED-1   Email UNLOVED-1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for UNLOVED-1

i really enjoyed your poem and to tell you the truth i imagined myself in that land. that is the land loves takes you to. probably you've been to that land i haven't but thanks to you i imagined it.

 otis omar
Isabelle
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Indiana


4 posted 12-15-1999 10:16 PM       View Profile for Isabelle   Email Isabelle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabelle

Nice very nice. Good description. I think we all wish to be in this land. I hope to see more of your stuff.

Isa =)
adg925
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5 posted 12-16-1999 09:31 PM       View Profile for adg925   Email adg925   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for adg925

I thought that poem was very inciteful and you did a good job
starboards
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6 posted 12-17-1999 11:39 AM       View Profile for starboards   Email starboards   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for starboards

Very Visual, I'm liken it!!

Starboards

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"You will see a lot of things,
But they will mean nothing to you
If you lose sight of the thing you love."
-from the movie "At First Site"
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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden


7 posted 11-08-2000 04:29 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

thanks. just addin this to my library.

Morning rain fell on my window, and I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not
watch_me_score
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8 posted 04-09-2007 09:14 AM       View Profile for watch_me_score   Email watch_me_score   Edit/Delete Message      Click to visit watch_me_score's Home Page   View IP for watch_me_score

hey, i'm a new memeber here and I've read several of your poems. you're a really great writer! i especially liked this one.
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


9 posted 11-15-2007 07:49 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
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10 posted 02-28-2008 10:32 AM       View Profile for ~frustrated writer~   Email ~frustrated writer~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~frustrated writer~

how about..

>> NOT YOUR ORDiNARY LAND <<

**LiRa**

 
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