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NaTaLy
Junior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 43
brooklyn,ny,usa

0 posted 1999-12-09 11:05 AM


walking on a dark street at night,
alone,
not alone.
i can feel your icy breath on the back of my neck.
a chill passes through me
walking faster now,
you wisper my name
a long neverending howl,
reminding me im forever yours.
i scream outloud with anguish but in vein.
my pain amuses you and you laugh.
i hate you with every aspect of my being but to you its just a chuckle.
begging you to understand,
praying on torn and bloodied knees
for my knight in shining armour.
but there is no knight,
only you
and happiness will never shine through
only your face in the uninviting darkness
is all i have left now.

© Copyright 1999 nataly mor - All Rights Reserved
poetry_kills
Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
1 posted 1999-12-09 02:10 PM


nataly ~ i dig this poem... this is one of those poems that is so shrouded in mystery that you want to climb inside the author's head and look at it from their perspective... i can only really think of 3 things this poem might be talking about, mabye you can shed some light on your original intent... here is what occured to me as i read: 1. evil (even the manifestation of Satan, perhaps), 2. a stalker, 3. a former lover whose memory haunts you... i hope to see more of your poems posted soon, the imagery is superb...

sincerely,
**jerome the boy with no brain

Star Fairy 2
Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa
2 posted 1999-12-09 08:00 PM


this was very expressive.. except i do not understand why it is titled trust...

 Don't Fall.. Rise in Love
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
3 posted 1999-12-10 10:48 PM


I love the mystery, the darkness woven into this piece..I too am curious to why it's titled trust...I maybe have an idea, but I'd like to know your thoughts.  Wonderful work!    You have a lot of talent.

 *Krista Knutson*

"I can feel you breathe, it's washing over me, and suddenly I'm melting into you..." ~Faith Hill: Breathe~


NaTaLy
Junior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 43
brooklyn,ny,usa
4 posted 1999-12-12 10:58 AM


thanx alot  but whoever this was written about knows who he is  
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