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peanogrl83
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since 1999-12-04
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0 posted 1999-12-04 01:21 AM


Okay, these aren't really poems, and I'm reluctant to post my work, but my good friend Singer1981 has urged me to, so I decided to heed her advice.

The first is a beginning to a short story I wrote...
"My hand reached forward to steady myself on your shoulder - but you were not there. My hand grappled with an intangible void that lay where you once stood. And I fell. I fell from innocence. I fell from sanity. I fell from light."

this is just something I wrote on the board in English today.....

"I feel like I'm aimlessly grabbing at grains of sand that swirl about me in a cloud of effervescent pain. The more I try to grasp them, the more I try to contain them, the more they slip through my fingers into a dark oblivion of unknown. I stand in the eye of this storm silently flailing, with the blowing sand burning tears in my eyes, each sand encrusted drop making the pool of sorrows below me that much deeper ... "

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Star Fairy 2
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa
1 posted 1999-12-04 02:39 PM


you are a VERY talented writer.. i think you should make ur posts more frequent... you have a beautiful way with words...

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Don't Fall.. Rise in Love
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Kevin
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since 1999-11-02
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Torrington, Ct, Usa
2 posted 1999-12-04 02:41 PM


oh i love the first one, thats soo cool
lol i keep reading it somebody help me

kari
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since 1999-10-03
Posts 104
Hyde Park, Ut, USA
3 posted 1999-12-05 12:59 PM


Wow! You are a fantastic writer. Those paragraphs sound just like poems. Post more of your work soon!
peanogrl83
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since 1999-12-04
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4 posted 1999-12-07 05:33 PM


I hearty thanks goes out to all three of you! :.)

Singer1981
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since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
5 posted 1999-12-08 12:33 PM


Awesome paragraphs Vren!  You know I love all your work!  When are you gonna post more, huh?     Email me when u get a chance!  Long time no talk!  
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