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Stephani Junior Member
since 1999-11-26
Posts 32massachusetts~usa |
tonight i sat outside the store crying on a bench he walked out the door with his hands in a clench he had called for his ride not knowing i would come back i sat to the side while he turned with his pack he hugged me he told me not to cry he seemed worried and told me he loved me but all i could did was look and sigh he walked to the car i barried my face in my hands i can't take it this anymore he still doesn't understand it's now been two hours i have not recieved any phone call i should buy MYSELF flowers so i won't ball he's never not called after a fight at night i wonder what's going on his mind is he alright? see i'm not as shelfish as you may find i just can't handle things i become too upset my heart pings when him and i have not met ~i wish the fighting between him i would stop i wish he would stop his petty little lies that actually mean alot to me~ ~my feelings get hurt too easily i'm way to sensitive to be alive~ ~it's all hard for me to deal with will somone fix it please? ------------------ (  **Stephani***  "A true friend will always stay a friend No matter if you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Welcome!! great poem...lots of emotions! ------------------ "If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was" |
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Oo0ostephanio0oO Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194Massachusetts ~USA~ |
I ALWAYS WONDERED ABOUt THIS ONE POEM of mine...DOES ANYONE ELSE WANT TO REPLY? (:***Stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
great poem, very moving. Might I suggest that you not use all caps stephani? it is so much easier to read text written in a little more professional manner. Im not trying to put you down, but the caps kinda bug me I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Steph...you are truly amazing! I loved your poem! And so did my english teacher! And she's hard to please! Congrats! --Lavada "Superiority to fate is difficult to learn. 'Tis not conferred by any, but possible to earn"--Emily Dickinson-"Superiority of Fate" |
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Oo0ostephanio0oO Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194Massachusetts ~USA~ |
Hey sorry about the caps thing. obviously I didn't realize it, silly! because "OF MINE" was suppose to be in CAPS and the rest little~chill! AND I can't believe you showed it to your English Teacher! Wow! That's such a compliment (I think )The only time I write is when something is going wrong in my life. It's weird, I think it's because I'm not very imaginative. But thanks guys! Hey if anyone wants to see my pic (the guy I always write about is in it, too) Just e-mail me at gitchi88itchi@aol.com <because I still can't figure out how to get it up on this screen LOL) (:***Stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
i have this feeling quite often!! at least someon can put it into words :รพ *how was i to kno that today id meet someone like you? how was i to see the light with him in my path and you too far to touch?* |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
stephani: i like the poem and understand the sentiment well enough (though my girlfriend and i rarely fight, we do have our misunderstandings)... the first time i read the poem i also read the last 6 off-set lines as part of it, and frankly it turned me off to the rest of the poem ^_^*... on a re-reading, however, i think you did a wonderful job... by the way, where exactly was this person going? just going home?... i suppose the image of a bus terminal came into my mind because of a poem i wrote about having to tear myself away from my love and take up my "pack" (which is a term you use also)... just wondering... get back to me if you can sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! |
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