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pop_tart14
Junior Member
since 1999-11-22
Posts 12
North Dakota, USA

0 posted 1999-11-26 11:22 PM


Alone-
I'm always alone.
Do you give a damn??
Hell no.
I need somebody there.
Somebody who cares.
Not having me be the last person
In the mind of a liar.
I need you to understand.
You're ruining me.
It's horrible.
Leave me the hell alone.
At least be true to yourself.
Forget about me.
The little b***h who screwed up your life.
You can't hide it anymore.
It's no use.
I'm worthless.
I'm helpless.
I'm nothing.

Please tell me what you think. I just had a huge fight with my bf and I had to write something down and I know this is a horrible poem but I just had to get it off my chest. Please help me. Wait...I don't need help. I just need somebody to understand. Or at least have somebody read this and try to understand. Thanks

[This message has been edited by pop_tart14 (edited 11-26-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 Amanda - All Rights Reserved
Krut
Junior Member
since 1999-11-26
Posts 27
Adams, Wi U.S.A
1 posted 1999-11-26 11:26 PM


hey..that is totally how i feel right now...my best friend and i are in a huge fight and u just basically said how i felt...email me...if u want...
Star Fairy 2
Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa
2 posted 1999-11-26 11:28 PM


i had a big fight like this.. where he felt that i had screwed up his life and betrayed him... but i didnt... we broke up.. i dont think that'z of much help or hope.. but it made me learn somethin about him and about myself.. and i gotta take care of myself in order to love him.. so even if it might seem selfish.. its not... if u did somethin wrong apologize.. and if he doesnt forgive you then that'z his fault.. and if u didnt do anythin wrong then dont apologize cuz then real apologiez lose meaning.. but the poem was really expressive and free flowing.. great job..

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Don't Fall.. Rise in Love
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Stephani
Junior Member
since 1999-11-26
Posts 32
massachusetts~usa
3 posted 1999-11-26 11:38 PM


i have a feeling i might know what you're going through
you can email me if you'd like

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***Stephani***

Natalie Guerrero
New Member
since 1999-11-22
Posts 9

4 posted 1999-11-27 12:26 PM


Hey, I undertand your poem completely! It was not a horrible poem, it expressed your emotions the way poems are suppose to.E-mail me to talk kay?
Laura
Junior Member
since 1999-11-26
Posts 26

5 posted 1999-11-27 03:01 AM


Natalie's right- it's not a horrible poem. You're just being honest with the way you felt. I wish everyone else was as honest as you are. Everyone needs to get something off their chest at some point. I'm glad that you got a chance to. Email me too, if you ever want to.

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*~*Laura*~*
"Dream over me with a tear, anything it takes to wish me here. Magic and sweet lulabyes, any lucky penny will do fine to wish me here."
-Nikki Hassman "Any Lucky Penny"

melissaramsour
Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 16
Aurora, NE
6 posted 1999-11-27 02:24 PM


Hi!
Thanks so much for sharing this poetry! And I hope you don't ever think your poetry is bad, because it's just a part of you. And this isn't bad at all. It's something that all of us have felt at some point-at least I have! Please don't hesitate to share more of your feelings with us-we're here to listen and help!
Melissa

Giggles
Junior Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 15

7 posted 1999-11-28 02:52 PM


No poetry is bad poetry, it just reflects what's inside. I think I know what youre going through, i just went throught it a week and a half ago. i learned a lot and i'd be willing to listen or share or give advice. the best thing is to let it out. E-mail me if you'd like.
Shorty Du Opp
Junior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 11
West Allis, WI, USA
8 posted 1999-11-29 06:27 PM


Fighting with a friend really sucks. I know how you feel. Last year my best friend and I got into a huge fight. Things between us never got better. When I got home from school most nights I cried. I wished I had someone to talk to but they were all on her side. I just wish I had the same courageas you did to say these things. I You said what was in your heart and that alone makes this a good poem.
Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
9 posted 1999-11-29 07:18 PM


It is difficult when you have a fight with a bf or gf. I am sorry for you hurt and anger.

I have one comment about the language in this poem. You are pushing the edge. I will not edit this piece BUT I would like to see the language toned down. Like I said you are walking a fine line with this one.

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