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Teen Poetry #2

Please Read my Poem

Mike Caputo
New Member

since 1999-11-26

Posts 1

0 posted 1999-11-26 12:04 PM

If You Could Only Hear My Thoughts

If you could only hear the thoughts in my head
Keeping me awake in my bed
Thinking of youre beautiful face
But I know with you is not my place

Can you take me back after what I did to you?
I know I am wrong but my heart is true
All the feelings in my heart cannot express
The way I yearn for your sweet caress

[This message has been edited by Mike Caputo (edited 11-26-1999).]

[This message has been edited by Mike Caputo (edited 11-26-1999).]

Laura
Junior Member

since 1999-11-26

Posts 26

1 posted 1999-11-26 01:14 AM

I love your poem! If you talked like that to me... I'd take you back in a second!!

melissaramsour
Junior Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 16
Aurora, NE

2 posted 1999-11-26 01:33 AM

This is nice. Very nice. I love the title!! You could maybe make it a little bit longer, that would just add to it! But I like it how it is too-short and simple! Thanks for sharing it!
*Melissa*

April Resi
Member

since 1999-10-18

Posts 119
Alabama

3 posted 1999-11-26 02:54 AM

Very sweet....I hope she takes you back! Everyone makes mistakes! Best of luck, and keep writing because I really liked this poem!
April

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...in your eyes, I see my future in an instant,
And there it goes, I think I found my best friend...

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 1999-11-26 10:34 AM

Welcome to Passions. This is a short and sweet piece. You expressed yourself very well in it. I hope to see more of you here.

I would like to draw your attention to the fact that this is an interactive board and your replies to others work is appreciated.

Krut
Junior Member

since 1999-11-26

Posts 27
Adams, Wi U.S.A

5 posted 1999-11-26 03:06 PM

Wow...i never knew guys thought like that...Mike it rocked...keep writing please...that was awesome....Id take u back too...Read that too her...she'll melt...

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