The Void..TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK PLEASE

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Teen Poetry #2

The Void..TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK PLEASE

kent_ray
New Member

since 1999-11-21

Posts 3
NC

0 posted 1999-11-22 06:56 AM

In the space through light and dark, I see the shadow of your world,
A large and vast, treasured thing, too many wrongs to be ignored.

A holy space within this place, the void is all that I can see,
And through the blackness and the glare, I see reminiscence of your being.

Once then you were innocent, so light and pure,
Once then you were my only hope, to lead me through this darkening place.

But alas I knew not of your pain, the darkness swallowing you into it's enveloping shroud,
And only in my own wants, you were gone before I could save you, and I cannot save you now.

And it is my fault alone that you have left, left from your lighted place,
And I know now what once was there, now the void is the home of your darkened face.

And it is I, who am to blame, for not knowing of your being lost,
And now I stand alone in the void, ashamed of my protection's cost.

And then I did not know, before the disappearance of your heart for which I cared,
Then I did not know, I loved you more than my world itself, and this ancient pain I now do bear.

But that was then and I have lost...the only thing which I was once proud to hold,
But it is too late now, for I am diminishing deeper into this dwelling of the aimless, dark, and vulnerable souls.

starboards
Member

since 1999-10-14

Posts 467
longwood, florida

1 posted 1999-11-22 10:25 AM

I liked it but dont blame yourself for things that you cant control, I feel ur emotions pouring out into this poem! I loved it!WELCOME TO PASSIONS!

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"If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was"

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Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 1999-11-22 10:31 AM

Welcome to Passions.

This was very well done. I look forward to reading more of you.

I would like topoint out that this is an interactive board and your replies to others work would be appreciated.

Star Fairy 2
Member

since 1999-09-06

Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa

3 posted 1999-11-22 11:36 PM

this was beautifully expressed
great job!!

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Don't Fall.. Rise in Love
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