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kari
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since 1999-10-03
Posts 104
Hyde Park, Ut, USA

0 posted 1999-11-11 05:53 PM


I am feeling very vulnerable right now and so I would appreciate some positive feedback.

The perfect life I live
Is crushed by hidden fear
I live my doleful days
Crying at the mirror

I am the 'perfect child'
I am the 'perfect me'
My mind is a piece of hell
of problems polished you can't see

The pill I look at in my hand
It tempts me oh so strong
I've never been so vulnerable
and deprived of bliss so long

But if I give into this for once
I've given up at last
I feel nostalgia everyday
Curse my wonderful past

You are there and I am here
Alone I cry at night
The things I want that I can't have
prove love doesn't always take sight

Shake away my lonliness
That I cover up so well
Free my pensive mind
Open a door before I fail

I still stare at this pill
and I squeeze it in my fist
It tells a story of happiness
Like those days that are so missed



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Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
1 posted 1999-11-11 09:07 PM


Wow, I can really relate....I know, its hard to give up anything, expecially those self destructive behaviors- they are a sanctuary....I struggle with these issues daily, but remeber, If your giving in, your giving up.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



banana26
New Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 3
Kittanning, Pa USA
2 posted 1999-11-13 07:51 AM


This is very well written poem and I completely understand where you are coming from. I suffer these problems everyday... but just listen to yourself and you will know what is right.. and never give up you will always find your way out!

*KAILA*

*thanks for all your help!*

Star Fairy 2
Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa
3 posted 1999-11-13 01:46 PM


this was very poignantly put
good job
keep your head up my dear
you'll get through this

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Don't Fall.. Rise in Love
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STACY
Junior Member
since 1999-11-12
Posts 10
veiNNie,ny
4 posted 1999-11-13 06:39 PM


ther is no perfect life but that doesnt mean you cant try to get to the best you can do.
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