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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 1999-11-09 04:13 PM

Why?
You told me always to be strong,
you never saw me cry.
But when i saw you laying there,
a tear fell from my eye.
I knelt down to give you one last kiss.
I just wanted to say goodbye.
You were my one true love.
Why did you have to die?
You're making me think harder though.
Thought's that life flies by.
so live your life to the fullest.
You never know when you'll die.

Laura Mitchell
Member

since 1999-11-05

Posts 76
Cincinnati OH,45238

1 posted 1999-11-09 05:55 PM

That's true! Good job!

kari
Member

since 1999-10-03

Posts 104
Hyde Park, Ut, USA

2 posted 1999-11-09 05:55 PM

This is a good message and the first 5 lines had really nice emotion. Good work!

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

3 posted 1999-11-09 08:11 PM

this makes me think of my bf dying....

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

4 posted 1999-11-11 08:28 AM

This poem is for Juston. In hopes that I never lose him, even though I already have.

Laura Mitchell
Member

since 1999-11-05

Posts 76
Cincinnati OH,45238

5 posted 1999-11-11 09:00 AM

Allysa,
Completely disregard my e-mail to you. I got your poem mixed up with someone elses. I'm sorry about Juston.

Mike Pickering
Junior Member

since 1999-09-03

Posts 18
Redlands, CA, USA

6 posted 1999-11-11 03:51 PM

Very nice, and I'm sorry about your lose. By the way thank you for your reply to my poem.

Amy J. Renz
Junior Member

since 1999-11-06

Posts 26
Newark, NJ, USA

7 posted 1999-11-11 05:37 PM

Thankyou for this poem, it was a plesure to read. You captured something that I too have felt. I hope your poetry helps you deal with your loss.

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