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Casper_68
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1
Page,AZ

0 posted 1999-11-07 10:07 PM


I wished you would love me,
You,my one and only,
I've had my eye on you,
And ever since I saw you I knew,
I would somehow get you,
And always stay true.
I knew I would fall in love,
Fall and land on the wings of a dove.
I want for us to have a perfect love,
One I have always dreamed of.
One where you would treat me right,
And I would dream of you throughout the night
We would be so in love,
Undoubtedly a gift from above.
There is not much more I can say,
So I'll just have to wait for that special day.

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Laura Mitchell
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since 1999-11-05
Posts 76
Cincinnati OH,45238
1 posted 1999-11-08 07:19 PM


Fantastic Job! You may want to go through it and clean up a few parts.
Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-11-08 07:50 PM


Yes, it does need a lot of work....the meter is VERY choppy.

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