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April Resi Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119Alabama |
Your eyes pierce my soul, Your touch sends my pulse flying. No one on this earth knows of our special ways, No one sees our true love, No soul but ours hears the words dripping as honey from our lips. I am alone in that I have felt these tender caresses, Your fingers trace my cheeks and etch that pattern on my heart forever. Those arms are strong and surrounding, Compassionate and loving in that moment of passion, Holding me toght as though I might slip through your fingers. Fire engulfing our entwined bodies, the flames still not as hot as passions alight. And when that wave finally ebbs, Your arms surround me still. Not confining, only comforting, Guiding and loving. No one knows when the heat drifts away with the wind A true love is left behind, A friendship like no other. Those eyes still look into my heart, Those fingers still touch more than my skin. My lips glide lightly over yours, Sweep slightly on your neck. Grasped in tight embrace, I breathe in your life and you breathe me. One love, one soul, one life. Your smooth skin slides gracefully under mine As we play innocently under the covers As if we were children. Ironic? No, it's fitting...that's how we began... Just children in children's innocence. We've come so far in so little time, I can't imagine what the next years of our eternity together may hold, So many years have already been added to our hearts. So many memories in so little time. No matter when or where our memories may be made, Still no one will know the silent shivers that travel my spine Every time your delicate words fall from delicate lips onto a delicate heart. Still no one will feel the trust blossoming from the simplest of smiles. Because no one knows of a love this true Until it has visited him and changed a life forever. For better or worse. |
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April Resi Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119Alabama |
I know this one is long, and not one of my best. But I would like some feedback and suggestions or thoughts from anyone. It was just one of those times when the words just kept coming and I had no idea where they were going when I started! Oh well, tell me what you think. Thanks! ;Þ |
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JEBE Junior Member
since 1999-11-02
Posts 32WILMINGTON, NC, USA |
For words just coming out i thought it was great.In poems like this certain words just make your heart sigh for example when you said "delicate words fall" that just grabbed my heart.i like the way your almost talking to your love.A few spots the rhythm gets off but that can be fixed.I like the mystery in it and great metaphors..... |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Great poem April. I have to agree with JEBE on how some words just seem to grab your heart. I thought this poem was lovely, and all out beautiful. |
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