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Star in Disguise ~sonnet~
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Star in Disguise ~sonnet~ |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
~I am posting this here in hopes that any other teens who want to learn the various poetry forms can e-mail me, and I can send you a link to a pointer page that tells you a lot on the different formats.~ A red rose glimmers from morning dew The sunlight filters through delicate skin Silhoueting veins it cannot pass through I'm drunk on the beauty, thoughts are aspin My wistful heart says love someday must win That our doves aren't lost in infinite skies But my dreams are dilluted once again And I am bewildered, lost in the "why's" A tear slips out to a God I despise He stole your presence from this dismal earth You were an angel, a star in disguise A destined savior from your very birth This morning I put this rose on your grave A small thank you for my life you did save ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Maitay Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 158Sisters,OR,USA |
As alwayd SD< this was wonderful, I believe that it must be you who normally gets us motivated when somehting needs done. wonderful job... ------------------ ~The price of finding love is to eventually lose it. When I wish on a falling star, I wish not for material goods but to show kindness to others and be content with what the world may offer me~ ~Maitay Mirabel Litton~ |
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Tina TT Junior Member
since 1999-11-01
Posts 45Victoria, Australia |
Beautiful!! Great choice of form  The last two lines were particularly good ------------------ ~What if you slept? What if, in your sleep, you dreamed? And in your dream, you went to heaven and there plucked a strange and beautiful flower? And what if, when you awoke, you had that flower in your hand? Aye, what then?~ |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Thank you, Maitay and Tina ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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April Resi Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119Alabama |
Put quite simply, I love it!!! I sometimes don't quite agree with some of your views, but that doesn't change the fact that your poetry is absolutely great! |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
You know Amy, me being the "Sonnet Hound" that I am...I was sure to find this jewel  LOVE IT Jenny Lee ------------------ Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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