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Our fates were tangled...
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Our fates were tangled... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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Our fates were tangled, we were blessed But soon our time expires ‘Till then don’t cry, nor fake your jest Let life stay as it is Don’t put your palm upon my chest We’re like electric wires Don’t close your eyes and do not rest Or else we’ll meet in bliss A single touch and flames will rise We’ll start eternal fires A single gaze and in your eyes My hopeless stare may freeze And love may come in a disguise Into immortal lyres My soul will pour out only lies And endless love may cease |
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Tina TT Junior Member
since 1999-11-01
Posts 45Victoria, Australia |
exquisite!!  ------------------ ~What if you slept? What if, in your sleep, you dreamed? And in your dream, you went to heaven and there plucked a strange and beautiful flower? And what if, when you awoke, you had that flower in your hand? Aye, what then?~ |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thanks again! |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Master...I really like this-the rhyme scheme is interesting, and only adds to the beauty of the poem. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This had a very easy flow to it and I enjoyed the twist you gave this piece. |
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