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Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

0 posted 1999-10-29 01:24 PM


Crazy man he is
He's killing in the garden
Bloodying flowers

Smell the guilty breeze
He steals virgin innocence
Bloodies the flowers

Please make daddy stop
Dirtying my garden, In
The bloody flowers

~This was written after I hear a tale of rape on young girls that is absolutely horrifying. Lost innocence is a tragic thing. ~



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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

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Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 1999-10-29 02:27 PM


Amy....Wow girl. Your talent amazes me. My blood ran cold while I read this. Great job!!
I have read and replied to many poems here this afternoon. I will try to get back here and get through the rest. I hope this is acceptable to you and your peers.

Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-10-29 10:43 PM


Marilyn...thank you so much..Im really trying to improve this forum

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 1999-10-29 10:48 PM


Anything that I can do to help. I sent a request for authorization on icq. I have also looked into the moderator thing. hoot is going to contact Ron for me. You were saying that you were not happy with the moderator's time spent here.
April Resi
Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119
Alabama
4 posted 1999-10-30 01:49 AM


that was great....it sent chills down my spine just thinking about it. Just the thoughts that that poem makes you think are enouogh to make you want to cry. Again, a really good poem!

suicidal dreams
Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
5 posted 1999-10-31 12:28 PM


Nice my dear Amy as always lavish and dark work love ya and your poems. btw nice way of writting about rape and its wrongliness.

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life is short kill quick

Tina TT
Junior Member
since 1999-11-01
Posts 45
Victoria, Australia
6 posted 1999-11-01 10:11 PM


Holy moly....so much power in so few lines. The bloodied flowers analogy is just chilling. Great work!

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~What if you slept? What if, in your sleep, you dreamed? And in your dream, you went to heaven and there plucked a strange and beautiful flower? And what if, when you awoke, you had that flower in your hand? Aye, what then?~

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