»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #2
»
coward
| Teen Poetry #2 |
|
coward |
|
|
angel1004 New Member
since 1999-10-24
Posts 8madison,tn usa |
be a coward take the knife slit your wrist and end your life or you can hang yourself on that tree to be rid of your problems and to be rid of me jump off your house so you can fly away be a coward just because you don't want to stay get a gun put it to your head "i want to be a coward" you had said slit your neck to lose your breath and bleed away in painful death end the fire in your heart leave the one who loved you to fall apart take your revenge by ending me but later you'll regret just wait and see stab yourself with that knife be a damn coward by ending me..... your life moral: suicide is another way to run away from your problems,but with only one difference....it's the cowardly way |
||
| © Copyright 1999 angel1004 - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
sometimes suicide can create more problems than it solves... but sometimes it seems like the only way out... and sometimes people just dont have the strength... i know .. i been there... and i'm not completely cured... ------------------ Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful moral with this one. I have to add that it is the selfish thing to do. On a more critical note. (if you do not mind) This could be a powerful piece. The message is very strong. I would like to challange you if you will accept. Use punctuation and capitalization in this piece. It will improve the flow of your words. I would love to see a revised version. I think you could go far with this poem. Keep up the good work. [This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 10-29-1999).] |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||