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my perfect gal |
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ANON Junior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 30NZ |
u r 2 me, what every women should be. As i lasy on my bed and gaze at the roof, I ask myself, r u the 1 4 me? your words my only proof. As i lay in the sweltering heat, I pray 4 the day when we both shall meet. I picture your face, your body, your smile, dam, u send my body into a frenzied denial. But from all your wonders to my demise, I can rape you sweetly, with my my piercing eagle eyes |
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Poetic Dreams Junior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 23Lindsa, OKlahoma United States |
Dang Anon you just make that one up on your own. No I'm just kidding. I like it. It sounds like you really need to meet her. Do you know what she look likes. Or are you just guessing. Not getting personal but do you know who you are talking bout? ------------------ ~Once it is said it can't be forgotten, but can always be forgiven~ |
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Angelkiss New Member
since 1999-10-21
Posts 4Alberta, Canada |
Wow! I really liked this one!! It gave me kind of a creepy feeling when you said you raped her with your eyes, but i'm told that getting those feelings from a poem is how you know the poem was everything it should be. Right on! ------------------ **angel** |
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suicidal dreams Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343Toledo Ohio USA |
Excellent piece I liked it allot very good work as usual. But you kinda scared me with the word rape at first until i read further and all was revealed about the meaning of this word. Great usage of the word ------------------ life is short kill quick |
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ANON Junior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 30NZ |
Wow, I cant believe ppl actually reply to my poems? thankyou very much everybody, i really enjoy your imput, That poem was one of my first I wrote to Tash, something which started a whole new era in my life, thanx again |
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