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Sweet Smoke
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since 1999-10-23
Posts 8
Kailua-Kona, HI, USA

0 posted 1999-10-24 06:18 PM


This poem is about when I used to take alot of drugs to escape from the world, and they pretty much controled my life. Let me know what you think.

I roll the bottle around in my hand,
it only controls me 'cause it knows it can.
I pop the top, take two pills,
The feeling of it just gives me chills.
With a final glimpse into my reflection,
I tighten my fist then smile with affection.
I close my eyes, and take a breath,
This one last time is all I have left.
Make it count, I say to myself,
As I place the bottle back on the shelf.
My escape from this pain rests in my hand,
It only controls me because it can.
I open my mouth and swallow the pills,
What was that? [i]drugs can kill[i]
You know what? [i]I don't care[i]
This stupid world is so unfair.
As I slowly drift through time,
The pain and fear slip my mind.
The vivid colors dance in my head,
My eyelids slowly turn to lead.
Next thing I know, the world is black,
Suddenly I want to go back.
Back to the fear, the pain, the hate,
Anything but this lonely state.
My body is numb, I want to breathe but I can't,
[i]It only controls me 'cause it knows it can.[i]

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~all that we see is but a dream within a dream~

© Copyright 1999 Sweet Smoke - All Rights Reserved
Maitay
Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 158
Sisters,OR,USA
1 posted 1999-10-24 06:34 PM


Wow, that one I could completely feel. That was an awsome poem, it felt like I was the one letting go of this world. Keep up the good work.

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~The price of finding love is to eventually lose it. When I wish on a falling star, I wish not for material goods but to show kindness to others and be content with what the world may offer me~

~Maitay Mirabel Litton~


Lauren
Junior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 21
FORT PIERCE ,FL
2 posted 1999-10-24 08:21 PM


hey thats a great poem.....reminds me of when my friend was into pill poping....hopefully you dont do that sh*t anymore....pills are really stupid....stick with maryjane if you decide to do any drugs...i think that the safest....

"when you grab a hold of me tell me that ill never be set free"
Sublime/Badfish

Sweet Smoke
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since 1999-10-23
Posts 8
Kailua-Kona, HI, USA
3 posted 1999-10-24 09:25 PM


Thanks for replying you guys. Yeah Lauren, i'm so over that kind of shet now. some weed once in a while is what i stick to. again this is so weird because no one has read my poetry before, this is only the second piece i've posted. kinda nervous..thanks so much again.
-stay sweet-

kari
Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104
Hyde Park, Ut, USA
4 posted 1999-10-25 06:26 PM


This reminds me of a friend of mine. She was on pills until they finally overtook her. I can understand how you think they control you but if you really think about it, you are the one in control. Don't let any piece of sh*t have control over you. I'm in the process of helping another friend get over a use of a lot of drugs. They are ruining his life. Everyone who suffers with the lack of self-control needs to sit down and really think about what they are doing. we shouldn't mess around with our lives. sorry if i offended you or anyone else. that is just my opinion. i am really happy for you if you're not using drugs anymore.
Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 1999-10-29 02:17 PM


This was an excellent poem. I applaud you for being clean. Life is difficult but if you do not find a way to deal with it now (with out drugs) youèll find the rest of your life more difficult. You have a talent for words. Use that to find your strength, it is a brighter world.
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