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Spring sprung (let me know what you think) |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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*this is a totally new style for me, so let me know what you think! Spring sprung so unexpected From melting snow I stood in awe Observed perfection of its flow So flawlessly performed Played by the notes Deformed in form So worthy of great words And yet neglected My soul alone became affected Pecked by the rain In gained commotion And grain by grain I drained emotion From weeping lashes In fitting fashion, Gentle motion, In passing rage And raging passion Unto the page [This message has been edited by Master (edited 10-22-1999).] |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
I really, really like this...this is definatly a different style but i love it! ************************************* starboards ------------------ "If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was" |
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StratMatt Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 87Macomb, IL, U.S.A. |
Very good poem, I'm always impressed with your poetry and am always wanting more. I like the style, it seems very fast paced and energetic in the way it's structured with the shorter lines than I'm used to from your poetry. I enjoyed your poetry before a lot, and this is also a very welcome change in your work. It's always good to expand one's horizons as a poet. Very well done. |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you both, this is a very new style for me, in fact I haven't read any poetry in this style before, but I decided to try it. I think it came out pretty good. Thanks for your responses. |
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