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Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
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That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

0 posted 1999-10-19 12:55 PM


While greenery becomes a spreading fire
Crisp leaves cover the forest floor
The brisk winds invariably fuel my desire
To have the freedom I did before

Crisp leaves cover the forest floor
The days flow quickly, I feel I must run
To have the freedom I had before
To enjoy this season for laughing and fun

The days flow quickly, I feel I must run
Instead of vanishing with not a trace
To enjoy this season of laughing and fun
I have to stop running from fears I must face

Instead of vanishing with not a trace
Losing my youth to infinite lies
I have to stop running from fears I must face
Quit being this coward, a me I despise

Losing my youth to infinite lies
My pride had fallen like blazing leaves from the trees
Quit being this coward, a me I despise
I'll come back not caged, but a bird in the cool breeze

My pride had fallen like blazing leaves from the trees
The brisk winds invariably fuel my desire
To come back not caged, but joyous and free in the breeze
While greenery becomes a spreading fire


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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

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Star Fairy 2
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa
1 posted 1999-10-19 06:21 PM


i luv the structure of this.. very nice...
and the words hit right on da dot... hehe quite nice...

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Don't Fall.. Rise in Love
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Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-10-19 08:17 PM


Star Fairy, thank you for the kind comments.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

April Resi
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since 1999-10-18
Posts 119
Alabama
3 posted 1999-10-19 08:34 PM


Like star fairy said, I absolutely love the structure of this poem! And the imagery is great. All in all, a very good poem. I like!

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