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Tal
Junior Member

since 1999-10-05

Posts 27
Singapore

0 posted 1999-10-05 05:27 AM

I'm kinda new to this poetry stuff.. cos I've only been at it for like, 2 years.. still, I would appreciate comments on any poems I may post here,, Thanx!

Dream Girl

My dream girl I'd love to find
When memories are all that's left behind
Of dreams at night when she was mine
But once awake there was no sign
She need not have the bluest eyes
That rival even summer skies
Her hair need not be of fine-spun gold
Or as long as Rapunzel's in tale once told
Her face need not be small and sweet
Her smile need not stop my heartbeat
Her figure need not be an hourglass
Nor her manners to highclass
She need not have a special skill
Like cooking, singing or paying bill
She need not be too short or tall
She need not come whenever I call
She need not be as smart as me
because then she'd be an idiot, you see
None of these qualities need she possess
Still two conditions nonetheless
The first is not compulsory
She should be able to love me
If you think 'not compulsory', why?
Well, it's obvious I'm not her dream guy
The second condition must be there
As important as my breathing air
And trult it plays the biggest part
I must love her true with all my heart
So this description that I have set
I won't tell you if I've met her yet
But you can be sure that if I may
I'll love her for the rest of my days

Now that I look at it again, it seems more like doggerel instead of poetry to me... oh well, try, try, try again..

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

1 posted 1999-10-05 02:46 PM

Gee...I wish there were more guys here in South-Africa that felt the same why you did.

shyone
Junior Member

since 2000-01-03

Posts 10

2 posted 2000-01-03 10:36 PM

I wish I could find a ream girl myself. Although I'm prety sure I've found her, I'm not quite sure that she's found me. I loved the poem. It spoke to me. "It spoke to me" sounds corny as heck, but it did.

Jer
Member

since 1999-12-02

Posts 443
USA

3 posted 2000-01-04 12:51 PM

Ahh... such a common dream all humans have. I wish you all the best of luck in your dreams but, you should wait until God lets you know of the right time. I'm still waiting. Anyway... great poem.

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