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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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Hello I am new here and I have never attempted to write before. I have lost a very special woman in my life and I wanted to share my pain with someone, somehow...I thought it might make me feel better. So I thought I would post it here..... Wanted to know what was thought good or bad....and that the message is clear...thank you so much for allowing me to enter in to your life.. YOU CHASED IT ALL AWAY: by First Knight ~For there was darkness at my door, taking my life from me ~From out of the mist you came, and you chased it all away.... ~My search for a woman of pure heart came and I dismissed it as a dream, ~for darkness made my search only a dream, and you chased it all away.... ~Spending my days alone inside, wishing it were not true ~The darkness kept me standing there, and you chased it all away.... ~So alone so incomplete I was, the darkness ruled my life ~Out of control for I was lost, and you chased it all away.... ~For in the darkness my heart cried for you, and you heard my heart call ~The darkness kept the pain so real, and you chased it all away..... ~The darkness filled my life so complete, but still there was a hole inside ~The hollow feeling of loneliness, and you chased it all away.... ~Now that your gone my ~heart cries on, ~the darkness comes from pain ~Happiness I knew with you complete, ~and you chased it all away.... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
First Knight ... it's beautiful and tender and your pain is real. Take heart, friend ... and welcome here. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Indeed it is beautiful!! Welcome to Passions. We all support one another here, so you shall find plenty who care and understand.  That must make you feel a little better? ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you so much Isis and Marge.....As I reread my post I said I lost her......what I mean more in detail is that she left me of her own free will after meetings online for a year.....We met face to face and after spending days with her.....she became so scared......she said I was to real....and she ran. It has been only days since then....and this poem came from that. thank you for your kind and gentle words and the comfort given to my heart |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Well, this is a piece filled with emotion. I think it was done very well, sir. Welcome home. |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
First__Knight...Very beautiful, and saddening.  Maybe you'll find happiness here at passions, and WELCOME!!! |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
I am honored by all your kindness here.....Thank you all so very much. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Hauntingly beautiful. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Mary Junior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 38Delaware, Ohio, USA |
Beautifully written First_Knight. I wish you luck in finding happiness! |
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Vers Librist Junior Member
since 1999-11-10
Posts 16 |
I'm new here, too. I have always found poetry to be a form of therapy. And, it seems, sharing your emotions with others through poetry is not only a release for you, the poet, but also a way for us, your readers, to see into your heart. An absolutely beautiful poem and heart. |
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jenmarie Junior Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 27 |
i hope writting has helped you - what a lovely poem - sharing really does help - just remember it does get better and keep writting |
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jenmarie Junior Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 27 |
i hope writting has helped you - what a lovely poem - sharing really does help - just remember it does get better and keep writting |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Welcome to Passions First__Knight... Your poem is indeed beautiful and heartfelt... I will be looking forward to reading more of your work... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Welcome, Knight. I sense the emotion of the poem. nice job. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
First Knight, I am posting a poem for you. It will not make you feel any better at this moment, but please know that sorrow is a very valid part of life, and in the end, you will be enriched because of it. I posted a poem called Wood Fences of Kentucky, which describes the fences, but now I'm going to post one for you called "Visions of Wood Fences", and also one called "A Mystery". Elizabeth Santos |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
I am overcome by the vast amount of response each of you have given to me. I feel so small in this place with all the wonderful true poets that I see here. I am honored beyond words.....Each of you and your giving heart has put a lasting impression upon this sad soul. Thank you and my day is already brighter with each of your sharings here with me |
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Dolphins3 Member
since 1999-09-30
Posts 135Wisconsin |
First_Knight Beautiful poem. Within the darkness There is light That light will help you make it through. And here is a big hug holding you tight. Welcome to Passions. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I decided to do a little searching in the old forums too  I'd be interested in hearing more about this tale, knowing what I know about you already. |
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