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First__Knight
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0 posted 11-08-1999 11:20 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for First__Knight

Hello I am new here and I have never attempted to write before. I have lost a very special woman in my life and I wanted to share my pain with someone, somehow...I thought it might make me feel better. So I thought I would post it here..... Wanted to know what was thought good or bad....and that the message is clear...thank you so much for allowing me to enter in to your life..


YOU CHASED IT ALL AWAY:
by First Knight

~For there was darkness at my door, taking my life from me
~From out of the mist you came, and you chased it all away....
~My search for a woman of pure heart came and I dismissed it as a dream,
~for darkness made my search only a dream, and you chased it all away....

~Spending my days alone inside, wishing it were not true
~The darkness kept me standing there, and you chased it all away....
~So alone so incomplete I was, the darkness ruled my life
~Out of control for I was lost, and you chased it all away....

~For in the darkness my heart cried for you, and you heard my heart call
~The darkness kept the pain so real, and you chased it all away.....
~The darkness filled my life so complete, but still there was a hole inside
~The hollow feeling of loneliness, and you chased it all away....

~Now that your gone my
~heart cries on,
~the darkness comes from pain
~Happiness I knew with you complete,
~and you chased it all away....
© Copyright 1999 First__Knight - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 11-08-1999 11:26 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

First Knight ... it's beautiful and tender and your pain is real.
Take heart, friend ... and welcome here.

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~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Isis
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2 posted 11-08-1999 11:31 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Indeed it is beautiful!! Welcome to Passions. We all support one another here, so you shall find plenty who care and understand. That must make you feel a little better?

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

First__Knight
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3 posted 11-08-1999 11:35 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Thank you so much Isis and Marge.....As I reread my post I said I lost her......what I mean more in detail is that she left me of her own free will after meetings online for a year.....We met face to face and after spending days with her.....she became so scared......she said I was to real....and she ran. It has been only days since then....and this poem came from that. thank you for your kind and gentle words and the comfort given to my heart
Sally S.
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4 posted 11-08-1999 11:45 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Well, this is a piece filled with emotion. I think it was done very well, sir. Welcome home.
Lynn
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5 posted 11-08-1999 11:47 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn


First__Knight...Very beautiful, and saddening. Maybe you'll find happiness here at passions, and WELCOME!!!
First__Knight
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6 posted 11-08-1999 11:50 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

I am honored by all your kindness here.....Thank you all so very much.
First__Knight
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7 posted 11-09-1999 05:17 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

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Watcher666
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8 posted 11-09-1999 01:46 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Hauntingly beautiful.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Mary
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9 posted 11-10-1999 01:33 PM       View Profile for Mary   Email Mary   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mary

Beautifully written First_Knight. I wish you luck in finding happiness!
Vers Librist
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10 posted 11-10-1999 10:01 PM       View Profile for Vers Librist   Email Vers Librist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Vers Librist's Home Page   View IP for Vers Librist

I'm new here, too. I have always found poetry to be a form of therapy. And, it seems, sharing your emotions with others through poetry is not only a release for you, the poet, but also a way for us, your readers, to see into your heart. An absolutely beautiful poem and heart.
jenmarie
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11 posted 11-11-1999 04:07 AM       View Profile for jenmarie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jenmarie

i hope writting has helped you - what a lovely poem - sharing really does help - just remember it does get better and keep writting
jenmarie
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12 posted 11-11-1999 04:07 AM       View Profile for jenmarie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jenmarie

i hope writting has helped you - what a lovely poem - sharing really does help - just remember it does get better and keep writting
Pepper
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13 posted 11-11-1999 08:54 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Welcome to Passions First__Knight...
Your poem is indeed beautiful and heartfelt...
I will be looking forward to reading more of your work...

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

Ohme
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14 posted 11-12-1999 02:08 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Welcome, Knight. I sense the emotion of the poem. nice job.
Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 11-12-1999 08:07 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

First Knight,
I am posting a poem for you. It will not make you feel any better at this moment, but please know that sorrow is a very valid part of life, and in the end, you will be enriched because of it. I posted a poem called Wood Fences of Kentucky, which describes the fences, but now I'm going to post one for you called "Visions of Wood Fences", and also one called "A Mystery".
Elizabeth Santos
First__Knight
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16 posted 11-13-1999 09:40 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

I am overcome by the vast amount of response each of you have given to me. I feel so small in this place with all the wonderful true poets that I see here. I am honored beyond words.....Each of you and your giving heart has put a lasting impression upon this sad soul. Thank you and my day is already brighter with each of your sharings here with me
Dolphins3
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17 posted 11-15-1999 12:03 PM       View Profile for Dolphins3   Email Dolphins3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dolphins3

First_Knight Beautiful poem.
Within the darkness
There is light
That light will help you make it through.
And here is a big hug holding you tight.
Welcome to Passions.
Sunshine
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18 posted 11-15-1999 03:22 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Welcome...
hoot_owl_rn
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19 posted 12-16-1999 12:30 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I decided to do a little searching in the old forums too  
I'd be interested in hearing more about this tale, knowing what I know about you already.
 
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