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Dear Diary

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Michael
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0 posted 11-08-1999 08:47 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

DEAR DIARY

Dear Diary, today I thought
Of all in life that's went for naught.
All I've striven for and strained,
In thirty years seeming so preordained.
With blackened clouds painting the sky.
I swear I heard passing Death sigh.
Still, victory lies unascertained.
Dear Diary, today it rained.

Dear Diary, today I wept
At promises made to me, unkept.
Idle hopes once held August,
Flailing in tears of disgust.
In sterility, finding fruition,
To the merriment of remission.
Ashes to ashes, dust to dust,
Dear Diary, today I buried trust.

Dear Diary, last night I dreamed
And all the stars of heaven gleamed.
But I awoke to dismal overcast,
The gray day draped over my mood fast.
So I walked the world in black and white.
Against twisted Fate's hands of sleight.
Against Time, itself, slow and steadfast,
Dear Diary, Today I faced my past.

Dear Diary, I'd sell my soul
To fill the emptiness of this "whole".
Douse the shenanigan of charade,
With unbridled passion on parade.
To know love is true, if just one night,
I'd forego all I know to be good or right.
To the neglect of love, never made,
Dear Diary, today's the price I've paid.

Through the blistered sight of a kaleidoscope,
Dear Diary, tomorrow I hope...

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Michael Anderson

And so, being young and dipt in folly
I fell in love with melancholy,
But dreams - of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned, and die:


EAP


© Copyright 1999 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 11-08-1999 08:53 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Michael, Michael, Michael, this is magnificent. A masterpiece.

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Denise

Mike
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2 posted 11-08-1999 09:01 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Impressive as always...
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3 posted 11-08-1999 09:01 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

MIchael, I don't know what brought this poem on but, whatever it was, it appears to be bad for you but what a thing of beauty it has produced in this writing.
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4 posted 11-08-1999 09:07 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Michael,
I agree with all the above comments, A wonderful piece of work.
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5 posted 11-08-1999 09:16 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Odd is it not that many revel in the fruits of one's misfortune.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ

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6 posted 11-08-1999 10:02 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

What else can I say, Michael?
Ditto, and amen

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I look forward to tomorrow, while looking back on the past. But today is the day I am living. And I expect it to be a great day!
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7 posted 11-08-1999 10:09 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

Michael.. ? could you maybe re-write this in your own words? Instead of the "poetic" ones. I have a feeling you may get your point across much more truthfully. Just a thought. (big words do not a poet make) and this is lovely but it seems your words are weighing down your feelings. (does that make sense?)



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Kay-lynn
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8 posted 11-08-1999 10:19 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I think your work is wonderful. As is.
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9 posted 11-08-1999 11:23 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Beautiful Michael (SIGH), how come my diary and journals never look as good as yours?????

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

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10 posted 11-08-1999 11:35 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Well, I didn't have a problem at all with this form. It was sadly beautiful...and I could feel the sadness in your words. No dictionary needed. Wonderful work.
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11 posted 11-08-1999 11:51 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn


Michael...Beautiful poem. I liked it a lot. Great job....
Michael
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12 posted 11-09-1999 12:02 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

redwriter1,
Forgive me if I sound offended, but I am. For you to imply that these are not my own words - or that I could get my point across more "truthfully" I take as an insult. My poetry is my passion. It is my stream of emotion put into verse. I can personally assure I am spending no time scurrying through dictionaries looking up "Big Words" as you say. For that matter, I am really wondering which words you see as BIG...kaleidoscope? - it's a child's toy.

You say my words are weighing down my feelings, I can assure you it's the other way around. These are my words, straight from my soul, you don't have to like them but do not question that they are mine and do not question that they are of genuine emotion. I am sorry if they seemed over your head in some way but no, there wil not be a rewrite.

Everyone else, I give you thanks you for your comments.

Michael
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13 posted 11-09-1999 12:08 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

This was both poignant and truthful ... I did not at all find it pretensious or forced. Poetry is both your passion and your talent, Michael. Very well written.

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die."

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14 posted 11-09-1999 12:42 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Again, I find myself awed at the way you can take something so mundane and everyday and turn it into a thing of beauty. Amazing!

Being the outspoken and opinionated person that you well know I am, I will do my utmost to exercise restraint in stating the following: I am deeply offended that anyone would suggest that your poetry was anything but sincere. In my humble opinion, this makes a much bolder statement in verse than it ever could in prose. (Judiciously biting back the rest!)

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

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15 posted 11-09-1999 01:33 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

I stand in awe as always. Excellent!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
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16 posted 11-09-1999 02:44 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Michael another excellent work you have crafted with your pen and your writers mind....do now take your bow for this one
Martie
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17 posted 11-09-1999 02:52 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This was beautiful and so well written. I could tell that it came straight from the heart....and to the reply you gave, I say touche'.
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18 posted 11-09-1999 06:25 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Michael, To not repeat the course of positive responses here would be difficult for they are all right on the mark describing your brilliant talent. You are a man who can reach so deeply into your heart and pull out the most moving words to make a masterpiece come to life.
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19 posted 11-09-1999 06:54 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Yanno, I'm gettin' to hate you almost as much as I do Balladeer! All these damn talented people running around here are starting to get on my nerves!
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20 posted 11-09-1999 07:17 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I usually find my vocabulary fairly extensive (or at least sufficient for my needs *S*)... but right now, I'm reduced to "wow!" Painful, powerful, poignant... wonderful work, Michael!
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21 posted 11-09-1999 08:10 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Michael: At least your diary says something interesting, I'm sure mine would probably read "Not tonight Josephine"...

Seriously: In touch with your emotions as always..

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.
X Angel
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22 posted 11-09-1999 09:18 AM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

Lovely piece Michael, I can relate! I am also totally envious! What a poetic mouthful you produced! As always wonderful in flow and rhythm! *taking notes*
Luv X

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"We have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night" (Tombstone epitaph of two amateur astronomers)
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23 posted 11-09-1999 12:10 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Absolutely exquisite Michael, and VERY evident that it came from the heart....
I am also in awe of your talent Sir.

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

Mary
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24 posted 11-09-1999 01:20 PM       View Profile for Mary   Email Mary   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mary

I don't know what to say here Michael...all of my words have been taken. I ditto all of the above (excluding one). You are a talent, and I thank you for sharing! Keep up the great work!!
 
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