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Dance On The Stars

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tori
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0 posted 11-08-1999 02:09 PM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

I was the dancer you were the tune
Enchanted melodies that grew to full bloom
Slowly and softly the music unfolds
Of friendships endeavors lyrics are told

In movement and step I glide through the night
Till together we hold and dance till first light
In one place in time we drift on free will
Without limits to hinder the way that we feel


This space is all ours to do as we please
As we dance on the stars in a warm summer breeze
Reaching the notes at the top of the scale
From friendship to lovers our lyrics prevail

With three little words we spoke as a vow
Forever and always we share now
No matter how lonely, no matter how far
We are the melody that danced on the stars

ToriŠ 1998

© Copyright 1999 Victoria Hosier/tori - All Rights Reserved
Toerag
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1 posted 11-08-1999 02:21 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

I really liked this.....kinda sensual, kinda sweet....
Watcher666
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2 posted 11-08-1999 02:28 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Beautiful!

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Aurora's Fire
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Very nice, the words glide as do the dancers. I liked the part when you say

"This space is all ours to do as we please"

Maybe I am the only one to think this, but you left two spaces between the first two stanza's, maybe this is like the dance floor? *S*

Martie
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4 posted 11-08-1999 02:58 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Beautiful love dance. Well done!
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Lovely Tori.....

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6 posted 11-08-1999 04:59 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Excellent, Tori. Good use of beautiful metaphors.
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I enjoyed this dance, Tori! Very well done!

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tori
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Thanks for all the wonderful reply's, glad you enjoyed the dance...
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beautiful write
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