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Kingdom of the Snow

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Mike
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0 posted 11-08-1999 01:46 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

In a valley in the mountains,
...in a land so long ago,
Lived a people O' so tranquil,
...in the kingdom of the snow.

Mountain peaks of pristine glory,
...rose as altars to the sky,
Down below in peaceful valley,
...never did the children cry.

Man and beast in harmony,
...lived upon the valley floor,
Endless harvests of land's bounty,
...sated hunger evermore.

Greed and envy, they were strangers,
...to the people of the snow,
In the safety of the mountains,
...Shangri-la to them bestow.

No passes in the ring of mountains,
...No pain could enter in,
So the people lived in Eden,
...peaceful valley without sin.

In the kingdom of the valley,
...Man and beast exist no more.
What became of tranquil Eden,
...people of the valley floor?

The mountains shielded all within,
...a barricade from strife,
The problem was no one could leave,
...and so there was no life.



[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 11-08-1999).]
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1 posted 11-08-1999 02:27 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Liked this much!!

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2 posted 11-08-1999 07:05 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Gee Mike, I really love this one. : )
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3 posted 11-08-1999 07:16 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Very well written with lots of creativity and originality evident Bravo!

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4 posted 11-08-1999 08:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Another beautiful piece, Mike! I so enjoyed this one!

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5 posted 11-08-1999 08:34 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme


Love this one, Mike
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6 posted 11-08-1999 08:52 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike ... I like !

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7 posted 11-08-1999 10:37 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank you all for your comments. I was afraid the poem was too songy.... I read it and want to break into one tin soldier...
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8 posted 11-08-1999 10:42 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Not at all! It has a song-like quality, but it is not sing-songy! And I like that song...one tin soldier, how does it go? ...off to war... Geeze, it's been so long!


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