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Jennifer Marie O'Neil
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port charlotte fl/bklyn ny

0 posted 1999-11-07 07:41 PM



Fights you dont remember
Love gone up in flames
Family that had left you
I know it's all the same
Walking in a stupor
Passing by your sight
Detesting your own presence
What the hell happened last night

© Copyright 1999 Jennifer Marie O'Neil - All Rights Reserved
Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
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state of confusion
1 posted 1999-11-07 07:53 PM


dang, haven't we all felt like that?

Good read.


Corinne

Saxoness
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2 posted 1999-11-07 08:22 PM


funny......I feel that way after a parental conversation. lol

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot



X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
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3 posted 1999-11-07 09:05 PM


LOL at first I thought geeez that's what happens when some people drink too much
then I thought...there's sometimes my husband and I argue and a day later I've forgotten about what LOL
This was great
X

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"We have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night" (Tombstone epitaph of two amateur astronomers)

Jennifer Marie O'Neil
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port charlotte fl/bklyn ny
4 posted 1999-11-07 09:16 PM


I am not sure what you are getting out of my poem but so long as you see something that is great - though drinking Is an issue or the issue - the big point is pain - pain from what ever happened last night - pain from family issues - their judgement and in a way having left you or left you out- hating your self for what you did wondering what you did - hating looking in the mirror - the walk of shame home ect....honestly i wrote this poem a while ago - maybe even a year i am not sure but thanks for reading


Watcher666
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5 posted 1999-11-08 11:24 AM


Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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