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jbouder
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0 posted 1999-11-04 06:21 PM


A fool to try to clothe true love with words!
When even dreams cannot, true love, contain,
But failure here makes not my song a dirge
When love exceeds the words of this refrain.
My passion surges forth to push my pen.
My clumsy hands try vainly to comply,
But how can I bewail my failure when
Without my love my inkwell would be dry.
So don't lament for me, beloved friend,
For Love's sweet kiss has blessed my wanting brow,
But weep for him who meets his mortal end
Before, on him, Her gift She does endow.
A foolish man, a fool for all to see!
Perhaps a fool, then, I aspire to be.

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Jim

"Don't confuse me with the facts, I've already made up my mind."


© Copyright 1999 Jim Bouder - All Rights Reserved
Jewl_24_1999
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1 posted 1999-11-04 06:29 PM


I see you found the ability to finish the poem that you started. It certainly turned out well. I can't waite for more of your work.

[This message has been edited by Jewl_24_1999 (edited 11-06-1999).]

Mike
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2 posted 1999-11-04 06:33 PM


somewhat partial to sonnets myself...
well done.. enjoyed.

Systematic Decay
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3 posted 1999-11-04 07:39 PM


Yeah, I like sonnets too, and this one is really good.

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Denise
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4 posted 1999-11-04 10:20 PM


Very very good! Such a tough form. How do you all do them and do them so well?

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Denise


jbouder
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5 posted 1999-11-04 11:12 PM


Thanks, Jewl. My notebook is full of rough ideas and, as long as my inspiration continues, I'll keep writing. Thanks Mike. And thanks Ms. Decay ... considering what you subjected my last sonnet to, I am truly honored. And Denise, I know you don't want to hear this, but "practice and patience". Thanks again everyone.

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Jim

"Don't confuse me with the facts, I've already made up my mind."


Watcher666
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6 posted 1999-11-05 11:16 AM


Liked this much....Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

jbouder
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7 posted 1999-11-06 09:59 AM


Thanks Watcher. If anyone else is interested in learning more about sonnets, check out Nan's workshop on sonnet writing. I highly recommend it..

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Jim

"Don't confuse me with the facts, I've already made up my mind."


caroline
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8 posted 1999-11-06 10:13 AM


Very lovely...enjoyed it

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats


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9 posted 2004-04-18 10:07 PM


wow! love this!
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