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fatwah
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0 posted 1999-11-04 11:17 AM


dead in the street
dying in heat
waiting for the sun
waiting for the gun
smile girl,
my world
hoping for release
hoping for some peace
screaming, crying
waiting, dying
dead on her feet
she is dead in the street
she's alive in my mind
but she's dead

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Watcher666
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1 posted 1999-11-04 04:38 PM


Nicely done.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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2 posted 1999-11-04 05:21 PM


So powerful, fatwah~I like the way this was written.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

"Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..."


fatwah
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3 posted 1999-11-08 04:43 AM


ah thankyouverymuch
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