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Darkness

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Isis
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0 posted 11-03-1999 12:43 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Always on the outside looking in,
I see the darkness bare it's teeth and grin,
Can't hear the calls over the din,
My pain it dwells within.

Stuck in the abyss,
The key to freedom a kiss,
Longing to be cocooned in bliss,
Can't see an end to this.

Darkness hemming in on me,
Arms of terror are smothering me,
Is this how it's meant to be?
Is this all that's left of we?

Drowning in pain,
No way to reach the shore,
Nothing but disdain
Give me strength to fight once more.

Locked in the padded white cell,
Nowhere happy for my heart to dwell,
Tears I've cried could fill a well,
Could some sorceress end this spell?

Barbaric emotional torture,
Too much pain to endure,
I need to find a cure,
My heart longs to be pure once more.

I beg you put an end to my pain,
There was nothing for you to gain,
I pray some happiness and laughter remain,
Don't make me live this way again.


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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



[This message has been edited by Isis (edited 11-03-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Isis - All Rights Reserved
Echo Rhayne
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1 posted 11-03-1999 01:18 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

I like this a lot Isis, just have two typos you might want to fix....the first one is in the second stanza..the last line you wrote; Can't see and end to this...Is it just me or should it be Can't see AN end to this not AND? And the other one is the second to last stanza....the third line; I nned to find a cure....I believe your nned should be need That is all I found, other than that I liked this a lot! Very well done! 2 more thumbs up!



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Watcher666
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2 posted 11-03-1999 01:40 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Hate that lost feeling,and knowing only time will help it pass.If happiness were mine to give you'd have it. *Hugs*



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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Isis
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3 posted 11-03-1999 05:29 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Thanks Echo all fixed!! Glad you liked it.
Thanks Watcher I know you would if you could hon. Thanks

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

aaron sanchez
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4 posted 11-03-1999 05:40 PM       View Profile for aaron sanchez   Email aaron sanchez   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aaron sanchez

wow! good writing. i like it isis. you have a very good style.
Lynn
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5 posted 11-03-1999 06:13 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn


Isis...liked it a lot....(HUGS) & 's
Pepper
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6 posted 11-03-1999 06:15 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Very heartfelt poem.....
dear Isis, I hope the pain you are suffering now is short lived.


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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire!
Isis
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7 posted 11-03-1999 06:18 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

People are responding and posting to my 'Darkness' topic but I can't read them, so thanks whoever you are

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 11-03-1999 06:28 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Isis,
Just want to let you know I read your work
and want to say be happy. Don't dwell on what cannot be, only on what can. Liked the poem.
Isis
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9 posted 11-03-1999 06:33 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

I still can't read my replies

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Denise
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10 posted 11-03-1999 09:49 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very well done, Isis. And I agree with Seymour! True words of wisdom!

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Denise

Isis
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11 posted 11-04-1999 12:21 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Thanks one all,
I do try not to dwell,
But sometimes my grief
Is as bottomless as well.

But I keep a stiff upper lip,
Most of the time at least,
For if I gave in to these tremors,
My soul would surely cease



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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

passing shadows
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12 posted 04-25-2004 05:14 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I can feel this deeply
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