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Kevin
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0 posted 11-02-1999 01:28 AM       View Profile for Kevin   Email Kevin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kevin

last night so brief, that moment still, I found a small perfection,
for years I looked, without a trace, to find in your complexion,
a little piece of happiness, your smile can only bring,
but as you lied there next to me, your eyes said not a thing.
why is it when you want something, its never yours to own,
why is it when you love someone, you always feel alone,
youíll never see me as I am, and probably just as well,
for words donít seem to hurt as much, when thereís nothing left to tell.


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love hurts
© Copyright 1999 Kevin Bednarz - All Rights Reserved
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Liked this, but might I suggest a few different line breaks. Separte lines instead of the comma's.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
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yeah i can never tell what to do there, thanks for the suggestion, all my poems look like this
 
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