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The Gift

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Mike
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0 posted 11-01-1999 10:20 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

The preacher called for contributions,
...As Christmas was approaching,
We have a family that's in need,
...The poor house is encroaching.

Next Sunday when you come to church,
...Please open up your heart,
Reach within your pockets deep,
...and do your Christian part.

That night we gathered 'round the table,
...Parents and six kids,
We all must make a sacrifice,
...To do as pastor bids.

I know this means we'll have to scrimp,
...For Christmas we'll have less,
Instead of presents for each other,
...Our gifts from God we'll bless.

We all got out our piggy banks,
...And poured them on the floor,
Mom and Dad gave all they had,
...We wished that we had more.

Each one of us did count our gift,
...Forty dollars and a dime,
We knew we'd give some family,
...A glorious Christmas time.

Next Sunday came, we went to church,
...And when came offering time,
Dad placed in the collection plate,
...Forty dollars and a dime.

No happier family did ever live,
...Than us that joyous day,
Thank you for our blessings God,
...At dinner Dad did pray.

Then at the door there came a knock,
...We saw the pastor there,
He handed Dad an envelope,
...Said, because we care.

We gathered 'round as pastor left,
...As envelope was opened,
Fifty dollars and a dime,
...We could not comprehend.

We never knew that we were poor,
...We always had each other,
Possessed two treasures made of gold,
...Our father and our mother.

Next Sunday when we went to church,
...When came collection time,
Dad placed in the collection plate,
...Fifty dollars and a dime.

Someone sent me this story in an e-mail... tried to adapt it into a poem.
© Copyright 1999 Mike - All Rights Reserved
Tina TT
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1 posted 11-01-1999 10:23 PM       View Profile for Tina TT   Email Tina TT   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tina TT's Home Page   View IP for Tina TT

its great! love it! the rhyme works well

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~What if you slept? What if, in your sleep, you dreamed? And in your dream, you went to heaven and there plucked a strange and beautiful flower? And what if, when you awoke, you had that flower in your hand? Aye, what then?~
Denise
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2 posted 11-01-1999 10:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

And an excellent job you did, Mike! It brought tears to my eyes. I wish my heart were as giving as this! Something else to strive for! Absolutely wonderful, Mike!

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Denise

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Not often do I read something that I get teary eyed about. But, you got me on this one. Lovely!

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I look forward to tomorrow, while looking back on the past. But today is the day I am living. And I expect it to be a great day!
Corinne
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4 posted 11-01-1999 11:26 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

This one sent shivers down my spine!

Very touching!


Corinne
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5 posted 11-02-1999 01:21 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Beautifully Done.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Mike
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6 posted 11-02-1999 07:40 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank you all for the comments. They are appreciated.
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 11-02-1999 08:11 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Mike,
Well done this is a keeper.
hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 11-02-1999 09:37 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I Love this one, wonderfully written and so touching. Bravo!! Take your bow now
Mike
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9 posted 11-02-1999 03:44 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank ya kindly Mr. Tabin and Ms. Hoot...
my wife worked evenings when I was in school so I could babysit... I guess that makes her an old hoot owl rn........... er... delete........ make that ex hoot owl rn....
er... me thinks I am going to be an ex something....
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10 posted 11-07-1999 11:20 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I re-read this and it struck me that the forty dollars and a dime turned into fifty dollars and a dime. I noticed it before but the impact of it just hit me as I read this again. Does that mean that the poorest family put in forty dollars and a dime and the rest of the entire congregation put in ten dollars combined? Wow, that says alot.
Thanks again for this gem, Mike!

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Denise

Mike
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11 posted 11-07-1999 11:38 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

you caught it Denise...
thanks for taking the time to re-read,,,
that was the intended thought.
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12 posted 11-07-1999 11:50 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

There is such truth in your poem Mike. And a wonderful poem it is! Love and happiness is worth more than any amount of money. There is a lesson here about giving..about our concept of who we are, how others see us.. I also may be poor by many standards, but I count myself rich in friends... I like the way you write -
Denise
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13 posted 11-07-1999 11:53 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thanks for answering so quickly, Mike. This indeed is a powerful piece. It reminds me of when I was in a time of need, myself and my two daughters when they were much younger. My pastor gave me an envelope and found us a temporary place to stay. After I was able to, I returned the money to him with a thank you note to him and the congregation. The note never made it to the church bulletin board. I do believe that he was the only contributor now that I think back on it. Some people are really angels I think! Oh, how I wish for a heart like that! Enough of my ramblings! Thanks again for sharing this!

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Denise

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14 posted 11-07-1999 11:59 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Mike,
What a touching, emotional poem! I actually got those "goosebumps". Inspiring and beautiful. What more can I say?
JOY 14
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15 posted 11-10-1999 03:07 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

I really, really liked this poem. It makes me think that you should give more instead of keep wanting more. The greatest gift is truly giving anything you have.
Mike
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16 posted 11-21-1999 05:45 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank you for the very nice comments...
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17 posted 11-22-1999 04:24 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I'm glad someone asked for this.... I'd missed a gem!!! Great poem, Mike!!
 
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