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Gone" {A poem about a boy suffering from Asthma}

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Thunder Moomba
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since 10-30-1999
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Baldwin Park, CA, USA


0 posted 11-01-1999 05:38 PM       View Profile for Thunder Moomba   Email Thunder Moomba   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Thunder Moomba

I opened my eyes widely,
My breath taken away.
I couldn't breath,
In any way.

I struggled for air,
My eyes filled with tears.
I held my neck,
And cried with fear.

I ran out my door,
And struggled to the liveing room.

My family stared at me not knowing what to do,
They called 911 Maybe they'll help me too

I feel to my kneens,
Still couldn't breath.
I crawled for my bag,
witch held my life. {Medicine}

I didn't make it in time...
I fainted on the floor,
Then slowly died.
My hand still gripping my back pack.
My family cried.

I passed away.
But I saw the tears mom cried.

I am gone now.
A memory away.
Family crying.
Ambulance takeing my body away.

I am gone now.
Sorry mom, sorry dad.
Little bro don't be sad.

It's no ones fault,
Only my self.
For I left my life {Medicine}
In a bag witch I could not reach in time.

I am gone now.
A memory away.
My asthma was bad.
And because of this,
That im dead today.

~Jr. Rodrigo M. Daz_

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This is a true poem/story. The poem/story was about one of my teachers sisters son that had left his "Puff" or Medicine in his school back pack. He struggles for it And coulden't talk or breath. His family didn't know what he wanted or needed. I know it's hard haveing asthma, I haveing it also. I wrote this poem/story A while ago. My 2nd Period teacher was very careful of me. Cause she has asthma and she dosen't wanna see me struggleing for air. I fainted three times because of asthma. I hope you like this poem/ story. Thank You for your time to read my poem.
If you don't know what Asthma is heres the Def.
Asthma(Az' Me) n. a disease in which there are attacks of wheezing, coughing, and hard breathing. It is usually caused by an allergy.
A lot of people have asthma, I am one of them. It's not really a disease its just that yer lungs get smaller when u do stuff thats tireing, too hard, etc. {E.g. Sports, PE, Cold weather, etc.}
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God Bless, and take care.
Hope you liked this poem/story


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WhtDove
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since 07-22-99
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1 posted 11-01-1999 06:05 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

This was really sad. My son also has asmtha. Though it only is seasonal. But I can imagine, cause I know when his comes on it's no fun!
Watcher666
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since 10-13-1999
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2 posted 11-01-1999 06:09 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

You expressed the feeling of not breathing nicely.Sad verse!

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Thunder Moomba
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Baldwin Park, CA, USA


3 posted 11-01-1999 06:19 PM       View Profile for Thunder Moomba   Email Thunder Moomba   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Thunder Moomba

WhtDove and Watcher sorry if it was a sorta sad poem. I just wanted to exspress in the eyes of the kid who died what happen.
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